THE PREMISE AMENDED
Topic: Notes

An idea can be like a bush, it can grow so much foliage as to hide the trunk. Since the summer of 2008, I've idea upon idea, each one evolving toward something new, secondary characters becoming primary characters, new adventures replacing old ones, until it becomes so convoluted, it becomes a thick tangle difficult to navigate. It's time to break out the pruning shears, snip off some wild tangent branches, and get back to the core of the story.

The story . . . which is what?

The Temperance Well is about free will and theological determinism, and if the two are diametric or can be reconciled. The original idea had a godlike being that could travel through time as we travel through space, and having entered our dimensions froze time since the history of the universe was "his" past. The whole idea was that if someone from the distant future visited the distant past, then everything between those two events was certain to happen, if we make the premise that the past is immutable. It very may be, and this is the common sense on the matter, though there are some scientist that speculate that the past may be as chaotic as the future, in that if we were able to travel back in time, we would find events have played out not as we remembered.

To truly get a grasp of this, one has to consider a world-line, a physical interpretation of an object as it moves through space, like a pinhead leaving a trail of thread. In an universe with an immutable past, such world-lines are static and unmoving in the past, and wriggling about like worms in the future—if we assume that world-lines extend into the future, as they would in a predestined universe. In an universe with a chaotic past, the world-lines in both past and future wriggle about, which was the condition the old character Kha wanted—a condition that set up the stakes whereby such a state might create pasts where other intelligent species never came to be. That's one considered possibility of the true nature of the universe. But from our limited experience, the past has happened and the present is a temporal horizon in which the only paths to follow are ones that build the future; we cannot cross that horizon back into the past, and the future remains as nonexistent possibilities. That seems to be our intuitive experience with time.

But in a predestined universe, a person's whole life exists as this odd temporal world-line, from the merger of world-lines of ovum and sperm, to the unraveling world-lines of decomposition. But from birth to death, there is a four dimensional object that represents a person whose three dimensional shape is naught but a cross-section. If the world-line is not being built as the person move through time, then what is it exactly that moves along the world-line as the person experiences time?

And what is memory? Is memory what we experience when we turn out inner eye to peer down the world-line? If so, what prevents us from peering up the world-line into the future? Or do we? In a nonpredestined universe, perhaps with no set futures, our imaginations are linked to possible future outcomes. But in a predestined universe, should we not be able to "premember" the future? Or is the Present a temporal horizon we can’t see over? These are the questions that lace the concepts of this fictional universe. (As a side note, I believe that predestined or not, world-lines can oxbow or maybe intersect themselves. I'll leave you to contemplate what that means.)

And so the actual physical Temperance Well was going to be the result of the merger of the four Shards of the Wellstone, that mighty artifact built by an elder race from a prior universe made to draw together the two branes and thus create the Big Bang. And Kha's meddling in our affairs froze time and created a predestined universe . . . but I had no plans to make "him" the actual God. And if Kha's actions were like a being from the future visiting the past, then why not throw out the whole idea of Kha and the Shards and make the Temperance Well a physical object that actually has something to do with back-in-time travel?  This solves a lot of bothersome problems.

Kha: a godlike being has the problem that its inhibitions and inabilities are purely by the hand of the author and do not arise naturally from the rules of the fictional universe. It would be difficult to craft such rules that in turn ruled out the godlike being. Kha, then should not exist.

The Last Shard itself is merely a McGuffin, a plot device the characters are after. In this case, the alien species Jautoc and Apaxan are made aware of Kha's goals through the Elders. Both conspire to hide the shard in the Earth so that Kha cannot get it—why can't he get it, because I said so. If Kha can pluck hearts out of chests without reaching into the body, he should be able to pluck out the Shard from the core of the Earth. But I decided that he couldn't do that on the weak premise the Elders made the Drawingstone that way. And so Kha needed humans to destroy the Earth to get at the Shard, but the Jautoc and the Apaxan knew that humans would be loath to destroy their own world, especially since the Apaxan dispersed them helter-skelter into the galaxy and no one lives there anymore, but O! the fond memories that have since evolved into humorous myths no one takes seriously. If you see the problem with that plot as I do, then you understand why the Shard has to go.

No more Kha, and no more Shard. And the hell with it, let's toss out the Jautoc too.

So, what becomes the Temperance Well now? It has to be physical thing . . . a construction . . . a powerful machine. And one not rooted in some hyperdimensional flight of fancy, but in real science speculation.

It has to be a time machine.

It has to be the very thing that has been created to invoke predestination.

It is based on the Tipler Cylinder, a hypothetical device (of infinite length) that once spun up to near light-speed will twist up spacetime near it as to allow time travel back to the time when it was first spun up to near light-speed. That the niggling thing about back-in-time travel, if you use a super dense spinning cylinder or a wormhole, you can't travel back to a time prior to the use of the device as a time machine. I first saw the cylinder on a Science Channel show about time travel, but the cylinder or tube they were speculating about was of finite length. I don't recall the specific length, but the diameter was six miles. My question of why six miles is what stuck in my head.

For most of the universe—or at least the time span of concern to humans—to be predetermined by a person or being from the remote future traveling to the past, the machine has to built and engaged in the remote past. This would be more likely a machine of the Elders. And the caveat is that the gravitational stresses are so severe that any spacecraft the humans or the apaxan were to use would be destroyed. That means a special vehicle must be used. It's this Elder vehicle that replaces the Shard. The vehicle can transverse the Temperance Well and return to the past. The assumption is that the cylinder was built, and the vehicle was sent out at incredible speed to invoke time dilation so that it traveled to the remote future rather swiftly from its points of view, and like molasses running uphill for the point of view of the rest of universe (although like a black hole, it would probably be hidden by an event horizon). But wait! It's two of them. Because the Temperance Well Universe operates in a predestined mode, it has completed its mission. As soon as the strange Elder craft leaves the Well, it emerges from the Well. The younger version of it moves off into the distant future, while the older version has the job of defending its younger self from those forces that plan to stop it. History is caught in a temporal causal loop, and someone (perhaps Raum, as I need a singular villain) plans to break it. Or maybe he wants to prevent it from being broken by those who think it should.

This change to the change to the change means no useless plot-hole destruction of the Earth's environment or the need for the apaxan to save us. In this revamp, we head out for the stars and the apaxan find us. I never liked making we humans the beneficiaries to apaxan altruism, even though it was a selfish ploy to hide the Shard. I think giving them an ulterior motive to manipulate us was a good idea, the premise it was based upon was flawed. Now the relationship is new territory.

The Mercator stories were shots in the dark. Talk about convolutions. There is too much going on, enough for a season or two of a one hour television series on The Cargile Network. The only thing those stories had to connect it to the Shard was that Raum would do something to make Kariden chase him into the time dilated future. Sad to say, its mostly back story, with even more past back story planned! I enjoyed writing the stories, but in the back of my mind I kept asking what it had to do with The Story. I still want things to happen on Mercator. I still want things to happen between Raum and Kariden. But do I need the Ravens? Do I need Raum to be a warlord? Perhaps not.

The new structure revamps "Signpost"—I did have larger plans for this whereby in the sequel "Unsouled", Kha cleverly recruits someone to thwart Kariden's endeavors during his pursuit of Raum—so that the Elder vehicle is discovered (which version?) on the Cross planetoid. Which leads to Raum's eventual arrival at Mercator.

Lots of changes, I know, but my goal is to whittle the story down to its essentials, get rid of unnecessary characters, maybe meld some together. Do I need Codus Cosundi? Or Wisty? Or even the Rector. There are lots of aspects for me to contemplate and consider.

But first there is this damned spaghetti western, which might actually have something to do with this Temperance Well thing after all. If not for this side track, I wouldn’t have found the means to do away with the Shard.

 

You might say it's predestination.

 

Rough Cuts: commentary on the original passes of the SFSW

Rough cuts

Introductions are the most difficult to write. They have the most important job in the story. It’s a greeting. A welcome. A sales pitch. It has to impress and intrigue. It has to set up the story. It has to set the tone. Sometimes it's good—and far easier—to plunge right into the action. I did not want to do that with this yet to be titled science fiction western. Inspired by Sergio Leone's classics, I wanted something more cinematic.

My vision was to open on a bleak landscape, a hybrid of Mars and Peru, under a bright cold sun. I saw the camera panning across this place with only the sound of the wind, eventually falling to the metal orb. Then we hear the sounds of another machine and see the mechanical horse and its rider descending the rocky slope.

It works great for movies and graphic novels, but for a written story, the reader should be removed from the narrator to get the full impression of being there. The reader should be parked behind a set of eyeballs and be in the character's perception.

I continuously edit, so unfortunately I do not have the very first rough draft of the opening sequence. However, I did save the other passes. I spent hours on three short paragraphs, and could spend more. But when I get to the end of the story, I might have a better idea of the beginning, and I'll tinker some more until it does its job.

Here are those prior passes, in order of production:

 At zenith, a bleaching white sun glared out from a shield of pale blue. Boulders, gravel, sand, and dust stretched away to an uneven horizon of faint mountain peaks ripping into a silver unforgiving empty sky. Wind whistled and moaned around thrust up ledges of dark jagged rock. Across the open plain streamers of grit flowed around a large spherical obstruction sunk in a shallow, damp depression.

The canister sat cracked and split like a burst pressure vessel where it had come to rest, the violence of its passage strewn with the detritus of bright alloys and dark composites: torn sheets with sharp twisted edges, or small clumps of fragmented machinery. The otherwise wind-smoothed surface of gravel and sand had been gouged and channeled where the metal ball had rolled and bounced, pointing back several hundred meters to the impact crater, a gash splashed into the dust and sand scorched black and glassy.

Another sound met the pained moans of wind . . .

 

Above an infinite stretch of boulders, sand, and dust, a bleaching white sun glared from a shield of pale blue. Across the horizon faint mountain peaks ripped into the unforgiving empty silver sky. Bleak. Desolate. The wind seemed the only living thing as it whistled and moaned around thrust up ledges of dark jagged rock. Across an open plain streamers of grit flowed around a large spherical obstruction sunk in a shallow, damp depression. . . .

The wind seemed the only living thing as it whistled and moaned around thrust up ledges of dark jagged rock, islands in an ocean of boulders, sand, and dust. Across the horizon faint mountain peaks ripped into the unforgiving empty sky bleached silver by a white sun glaring out from a dome of pale blue. Bleak. Desolate. Near a cap of bedrock streamers of grit flowed around a large spherical obstruction sunk in a depression of  shallow, damp sand. . . .

 

Serpents of sand and dust rippled here and there across the wasteland like hunters on the prowl. Grains rasped against scattered boulders and wind moaned around up-thrust ledges of dark jagged rock, sighing a haunted lament across desolation, the voice of the world. Faint mountain peaks in the deep west ripped into the unforgiving silver sky. The noon white sun glared from a smear of pale blue. Near a cap of bedrock, the streamers of dust flowed around a large spherical obstruction sunk in a depression of shallow, damp sand. . . .

 

All horrible, horrible, horrible. Not too far removed from a tongue twister.

After having written much of the first scene, I had a moment of doubt whereby I realized I could increase the action and tempo by not having the gunman come across the cargo orb, but by having the damn thing coming down upon him as he crossed the desert. Man would that be awesome!

I was seriously thinking of a rewrite but I talked myself out of this action scene because I felt it was a little too much, more comic-bookish than what I had envisioned. I strive for a little more realism, a lot more science in the fiction. I mean seriously, what are the odds of a jettisoned cargo globe actually coming down on a lone rider in a world sparsely populated? I feel this requires the reader to suspend disbelief to a greater magnitude than what I'm aiming for, and thus you the reader will expect more improbable acts to follow. It also sets a tone vastly different than what I have planned. This is a story of discovery: We discover the orb in the desert, we discover the pod and the lockbox, we discover the villain is looking for the lockbox and the "key" inside, we will discover what that key "opens". This is more of a hunt than a chase. No need to gallop out from under certain death, no matter how great it might look on an anamorphic screen with thundering surround sound.

Originally, the gunman fills his water bins first then has the showdown with the harriers, poor bastards that show us the desperation for water the people of Ureys have, and what a bad-ass the gunman is. In this order, the harriers are merely an obstacle to his leaving alive and unrobbed. That's not much fun. Conflict is added and enhanced by having the water the trophy to defeating these greedy men. Oh, yeah. On the very first pass, as soon as they draw guns, he drops 'em without so much as a word. But it's not supposed to be that easy. If your characters are having an easy time, you're doing it wrong.

Then I wanted to slow things up before we get to the escape pod with this bit of business:

By evening the gunman had reached the impact site of another water globe. This one had smashed into rock. There was nothing but small flotsam of debris and fresh broken rock. The wind had begun drifting toward the south, long streamers of dust pointing the way. The rambler snorted and whined nervously; oxygen levels were falling.

The rider slipped his hat back and pulled a breather mask up from the console between the control levers. He secured it over his mouth and twirled the flow valve at his right knee open. Oxygen sighed.

In the distance, the sea of sand crept up onto bedrock. He unhooked goggles from the console and slipped them on, tapped into the sensor feeds from the rambler. After adjusting his hat back on his head, the rider shifted a lever to set the machine from walk to drive mode. The rambler crouched, tucking its legs and extending its tracks into place

 

The weirdness with the oxygen will be explained, so hold your ramblers, but here I get into dealing with the oxygen problem too soon where it can't be used as a . . . (sigh) plot device. I just wanted to get to the rambler's drive mode so bad. It walks, it rolls, it’s like a small truck sized ATV with legs and tank treads! I was also going to have him camp out for the night, setting up a tent, and cooking a meal, all to show how things are done on the trail without wood. Maybe time for that later in scenes that actually move the story along.

Originally, this is what happened in the pod:

The arm fell and swung, the hand like a claw. The pilot moved no more. The gunman’s breath plumed and dispersed.

Three.

The gunman looked around at the cargo boxes. They were numbered in serious stencils. He moved to the one appropriately marked and unlatched it from the wall. He wrestled the cargo bin to the hatch and let it fall out. He climbed down and tugged the box out from under the craft. The rambler snorted and whinnied. He would need his oxygen mask soon.

The cargo bin was not locked and he undid the latches that circled its lid. He pulled the lid up and set it aside. A small trunk lay in wait, a box within a box. The gunman lifted it up seeing all he needed to see. The lockplate had the distinct characteristics of a biolock. This personal trunk would not open unless the owner was physically touching it . . . and alive.

“Hmm.” The gunman frowned.

 

Seriously, that was it, then on to Cavan Brovorchi's despicable self. Well, gosh that was easy, just get the cargo bin and look into it. Frank, when I said I needed to add conflict to a scene, that was the one. So instead of needing the breather mask soon, I decided it would be best if he needed the breather now. Yeah, he could have gone outside, got his oxygen supply, and went back for the bin, but I did some quick internet research on oxygen deprivation and decided that when it becomes difficult to think, you're liable to make poor decisions. Plus it’s a great way to show how dangerous Ureys is. The planet will freaking kill you, even if you are careful.

Scene Two: The Brovorchi Situation did not go through a lot of changes. It pretty much stands as original material.

On the other hand, The Weslock scene had the most changes.

In the first pass, ol' Sarko was giving the business to Clovovac while Gorro held Dusana. The idea was that the Good Captain Weslock had a crew and had hired Sarko and Gorro to intercept Clovo and Dusana at the escape pod.

“Where is it!”

The man holding Clovovac was a filthy straggler, a man who reeked of sweat-soaked coats and an unwashed mouth of food bits gone to spoil in the gaps of his teeth—what he had left. Wild, large eyes rolled beneath a knit cap of dust speckled dark green. Sunlight gleamed off his greasy face, at odds with the coating of grime and grit.

Again, he clouted Clovo against the side of his head in a hand wrapped in a dirty make-shift glove of swatches. “You spoke with him,” the man shouted and pointed at the escape pod leaning on its side in the bright morning sun with Clovo’s jumper parked behind it. Cloth around the man’s hand hung like a loose bandage. “Tell me where it is!” Clouds of his breath hung on the air.

Clovo shivered. His coat had been stripped off. “Dead, when we arrived. I told you.”

“You tell me lies,” the tramp said and back-handed Clovo, letting him fall sideways into the rough sand. A heavy boot toe slammed into his ribs, emptying his lungs in a torrent of molten pain. That dirty swathed hand grabbed his hair, pulled his face up from the sand. Clovo’s eyes and mouth scrunched in pain and fear. He choked to get his lungs restarted.

“But maybe she won’t, no?”

Clovo focused across the sand to the blurry figure of Dusana. She screamed and tried to buck away from the captor that held both her upper arms. She too had been stripped of her coat. Bastards. He coughed and drew a ragged breath. “Don’t hurt her.”

The vagabond laughed. Clovo heard the whine of a power pack charging. No! He pulled trembling arms underneath him and struggled to get to his feet. Laughter assailed him and a boot heel pushed him over. Sand splashed into his mouth. Clovo rolled onto his back, his heels and palms digging into the sand as he attempted to get away.

Dusana watched in horror as the desert harrier pulled his pistol from its place inside his ragged coat and leveled it at Clovovac’s face. A hot pulse of plasma left a smoking ruin in its path. She screamed until her throat became a hoarse wreck and sparkles danced in gray vision.

Dusana sagged in her captor’s arms, her long hair flowing like a tattered flag in the cold wind.

Sarko opened his coat and tucked his pistol into the net of wide strips sewn into the lining. With the toe of his boot he turned the body over. The back of the head was a burnt funnel large enough for his fist. “Your lies are gone like your life, preeta.” He chuckled and walked away to cross the several meters where Gorro stood near their truck holding the fainted woman . . . the screamer. How he could make her scream. And would.

And thus with the Captain knowing Sarko, their exchange went like this:

“My good Sarko,” the Captain said with a hint of a smile under his drooping mustache. “What you lack in sagacity, you make up in lassitude.”

The meaning was lost to Sarko, but the tone sounded friendly. “Thank you Captain Weslock.” He beamed, thinking of the hectoliters he would receive for this bit of work.

Weslock stepped nearer and slapped a naked hand on Sarko’s shoulder, sending up puffs of dust. “Seems like you have gotten a head start.”

Sarko turned halfway, putting his back to the wind, and opened a palm to the dead man. “You said you was gonna question ‘em, so I figured, why wait.” Sarko shrugged. “He didn’t want to talk. But the girl. I think she will, no?” His muddy eyes gleamed in hopes of appraisal.

Weslock left Sarko’s side and walked to the corpse. He reached into a coat pocket and pulled out a white elastic glove. He heard the moans of the waking woman and knew without looking his men were tending to her. Dusana and Clovovac. Sand had begun to pile up around the corpse. He kneeled at the body and tugged his right hand into the glove. He probed the devastating wound with the gloved fingers. Sarko came to stand near him.

Weslock motioned the man to squat. Sarko did, grinning and nodding like a fool. Proud of his kill. “What I actually said,” the captain intoned, “was that I was going to ‘extract their knowledge’”. Sarko continued to grin and nod. Weslock grinned back. He put a hand on the man’s shoulder. “I don’t have time to waste with questions and torture.”

Sarko waited expectantly.

Weslock rolled his gloved hand around the gaping hole in Clovo’s head. “What I had planned to do, my vacuous dear Sarko, was to pull information directly from the visual cortex. To see what they saw.”

“Ah,” Sarko nodded. “Is a good plan.”

“Yes,” Weslock rejoined. “From this area here that you have so expertly eliminated.”

Sarko’s ears heard only praise. He chucked like a man over a cold pint. “I am a good shot. No time for lies, eh? No time wasted with more questions, like you said, no?”

“Ah, my good Sarko, my time has been wasted in profligacy.” Weslock’s naked hand crept toward Sarko’s neck . . .

And the glove/knife scene is pretty much the same. Then I had a bit of business between Weslock and his first officer over the hiring of such idiots that are doing more harm than good.

Standing, he noticed his first officer standing meters away, back to the wind, worry on his face. “Who hired these men? Was it you Tofuld?”

Tofuld seemed to stand a little taller, more rigid. “Yes captain.”

“Apparently, competent men to too much to ask for.”

Tofuld swallowed. “Ureys doesn’t exactly have the best pool to pull from.”

Captain Weslock shrugged as he began to advance on his officer. “Buy cheap, get cheap, eh? This moon does seem to have a problem with ubiquitous idiocy.”

“That it does,” Tofuld breathed. The fog of his exhalation blew away as Weslock stopped before him. Their eyes locked, but Tofuld lost against the impulse to look away.

“Your sidearm, mister Tofuld, if you please.”

Tofuld knew better than to question the order. With a nervous hand he pulled aside his long coat from the lower button at his groin and unsnapped the strap that secured his pulser in its holster. To die in this frigid desert. He would be a man and not snivel for his life. He withdrew the gun and handed it over.

“Thank you mister Tofuld.” Weslock threw the charging switch. The gun began to hum. He looked around at his waiting men.

“Is there anyone amongst you who thinks himself deserving of promotion?” They returned blank stares, refusing to acknowledge the first officer. “No one,” Weslock queried. He waited several breaths gauging the men before throwing his hard gaze back to Tofuld. “Seems no one is ready for the challenges of command.”

“No sir,” Tofuld forced out of his mouth.

“Extend your hand,” Weslock ordered.

Confusion washed over the officer’s face. “Sir?”

“Extend your hand.” Slow. Deliberate.

The officer stammered, “Sir, this isn’t necessary. I’ve—”

Weslock raised the pulser to the man’s forehead. “Your hand or your life mister Tofuld!”

Tofuld started to raise his right hand but thought better of it and stripped the glove from his left. No need to ruin a good glove. He held the hand out like a benediction and tried to clamp his scream behind gnashing teeth as light and plasma scored a coin sized hole through his flesh. He drew his arm to his body, his right hand clutching the wrist in a death grip. His injured hand was a useless claw at the end of his arm.

“You’ve a debilitating wound, mister Tofuld. Go tend to it.”

The first officer staggered back to the lighter.

Nothing wrong with this, other than the fact that it does not move the story along. So I replaced it with this bit:

The captain pulled a flask from inside his coat and mouthed the cap free leaving it to dangle on a lanyard. He poured water over the gory blade, washing the blood into the sand and gravel. The blade flowed back into a glove and Weslock wriggled his fingers. He stood, noticing his men standing in a spaced arc, one holding Dusana up on her feet, her coat caped around her shoulders. Gorro stood away from them like a statue, as if there was no one inside that thick coat or behind those goggles. Weslock took a swallow of water, capped the spout, and tossed the canteen to Gorro.

The bundled man snatched the flask out of the air with casual dexterity. Instead of drinking, he tucked the canteen into a cargo pocket on the thigh of his pants. Weslock smiled thinly. Not a desperate and greedy man, this Gorro.

“Pay him his water,”  Weslock enjoined, “Sarko’s included.” One of the men stepped over to Gorro to make arrangements. To the men with Dusana: “Take her aboard. Start the process. We’ll see what’s in that pulchritudinous head of hers.” His men escorted the submissive girl to the back of the lighter where the aft cargo door had been raised and the ramp deployed and extended. . . .

Weslock goes into the escape pod, looks around, cuts of Laanid's head (who was initially Waanid) and returns.

As he walked back to the Filthy Tramp’s lighter, Gorro stood over the dead Sarko, flask in hand, scarf looped loose around his neck exposing his mouth. Weslock grew wary over this man having thoughts over his dead partner. “Are we going to have a problem,” he asked as he neared with his grisly cargo.

Gorro never moved to look at him. “Ufeth clup sovek.” He was a stupid man.

Weslock clapped him on the shoulder as he passed. “Don’t forget it, preeta.”

His first officer, Tofuld, waited at the bottom of the ramp when Weslock rounded the port engine’s thruster channels. He stood rigid as a regimental officer, his dark blue duster clasped tight against his form. “I’ve ran a comprehensive scan. She doesn’t know anything more than we already know.”

Captain Weslock shrugged. He hadn’t expected much from Dusana, but there could be surprises. He lifted the head. “Maybe you can get something out of this.”

Tofuld frowned and extended a leather gloved hand to receive the postmortem decapitation. “The synapses might not have deteriorated too bad. Triggering memory might be a problem though.”

“I’m sure you can coax something out of it.” Weslock moved up the ramp into the cargo bay of the lighter. . . .

Then he and Tofuld are in the hold looking at Laanid's memory scan. Again, it's a pretty solid piece of work, but should Wessy have a crew? I began to think not. He's after something very powerful and the less people that know about, the better for him. He wouldn't put himself into a position where an underling could betray him. While that would certainly add entertaining conflict, the story is about three characters on this search. Too many clutter the story.

So I got rid of the crew and had these scenes:

The bundled man snatched the flask out of the air with casual dexterity. Instead of drinking, he tucked the canteen into a cargo pocket on the thigh of his pants. Weslock smiled thinly. Not a desperate and greedy man, this Gorro.

“I owe you water,”  Weslock adjured, “Sarko’s included.”

Gorro’s aim never wavered. Weslock could blade the glove and wrist-flick it through the air before Gorro could register the motion as an attack. “Are we going to have a problem?”

The hired gun stood motionless, his eyes hidden behind the dark goggles. His voice came muffled under the scarf, “Ufeth clup sovek.” He was a stupid man. He tucked his gun away.

“Don’t forget it, preeta.” Weslock reached into trouser pocket and clasped fingers around a small remote transmitter. He thumbed a button. “You’re water is in the back,” he said as the lighter’s rear cargo door began to lift.

Gorro hesitated and pointed at Dusana. Weslock shrugged. “Where is she going to go,” he called. Gorro turned away and went to the truck to pull it around to the back of the lighter. . . .

He gets the head out of the pod . . .

As he walked back to the Filthy Tramp’s lighter, Dusana paled upon seeing his grisly cargo. “Let’s go,” he said as he neared her. He passed and she got to her feet, thrusting her arms into the sleeves of her jacket.

Gorro waited at the bottom of the ramp when Weslock rounded the port engine’s thruster channels. His wide truck idled nearby, the stowage bay loaded with cases of water bins. He had lowered his scarf so that it exposed his mouth and chin and hung in loose coils around his throat. “Where’s the rest?” He did nothing to hide the threat in his tone.

Weslock passed him with Dusana in submissive tow, his boots clanging on the metal ramp plates. “You’ll get that when I find what I’m looking for.” Weslock turned his head to his shoulder. “And maybe more.”

“More,” Gorro pondered watching the captain step onto the deck of the cargo bay. “More work?”

Weslock stopped and turned halfway around, eying the smoky lenses of Gorro’s goggles. “More if I get a good look inside that head of yours.” He waved his gloved hand around the back of his head.

 

But would he hire Sarko and Gorro? I don't see that either, but I needed Sarko to disrupt his plans. And while none of this is bad, it leaves too many loose threads. I left myself with two people wronged: Gorro and Dusana, who could likely find an alliance and seek revenge against Weslock. I didn’t want that notion floating around in the reader's mind, that these people might resurface. I honestly didn't know quite what to do with them, except get rid of them, leaving me with Sarko using Dusana to force Clovo to talk. And while it is a cold act, it makes sense for Sarko to kill both of them, he doesn't want them hampering his efforts. He's removing obstacles and as an obstacle himself, gets removed by Weslock.

 

“Ah, my good Sarko, my time has been wasted in profligacy.”

I enjoyed this line so much as it really nailed the Weslock personality, but each time the scene changed, the line didn't quite work. It works if Sarko is a hired hand. It doesn't if Weslock is meeting Sarko for the first time. So I tried to force it in by having Sarko say something that warranted such a response. This is called: The author reaching into the story. It's a no-no. As much as I liked that phrase, it needed to go so that something more fluid and natural take its place.

A note of the foreign language: its derived from Eastern Europe languages thanks to the internet translator sites. Most of it is a phonetic interpretation while some are direct current spelling.

The Sci-fi Spaghetti Western
Topic: Other

It's been some time since I've posted. I needed a break from the world of Mercator and was struggling with some "prequel" material. Then one night at Wal-Mart I chanced upon two double feature DVD: Sergio Leone's classics "A Fistful of Dollars", "For A Few Dollars More," and "The Good, The Bad, and The Ugly", plus "Hang 'Em High." Having seen these movies with my dad on television as a boy, I decided to buy them. What struck me was the dynamic character introductions. You knew who these guys were and stood for immediately. Here was a lesson to learn.

So I thought I would do something different for a change and do something a little funner as an exercise, a sci-fi spaghetti western, and admittingly a rip off of Leone's archetypical characters and story lines.

It hasn't been as easy as I hoped. I open on three characters and I've been beating and shaping these introductions for a few weeks--I haven't completed the third character's intro, but I think I've got the first two worked out well enough for public veiwing.

And because it's science fiction, its really a four character introduction, the fourth character being the planet. It's just as important to let the reader know the environment and the culture shaped by it.

In Leone's westerns, the plots center around gaining a fortune, usually money or gold. That wouldn't work too well in a sci-fi setting, so the fortune is something other than bags of gold coins, but of something the characters believe will bring them wealth. And so the hunt and the chase is on.

The story is yet to be titled.

 

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The rider stared at the object along his path. Here was fortune, for good or for ill.

The globular canister sat cracked and split like a burst pressure vessel where it had come to rest near a cap of bedrock, sunk in a depression of shallow damp sand. Thin wary eyes followed the gouged channel of gravel and sand where the metal ball had rolled and bounced, the violence of its passage strewn with the detritus of bright alloys and dark composites: torn sheets with sharp twisted edges, or small clumps of fragmented machinery. Several hundred meters back he saw the edge of the impact crater, a gash splashed into sand scorched black and glassy.

Serpents of sand and dust rasped against the surface of the canister. Wind moaned its lonely haunt across up-thrust ledges of dark jagged rock scattered across the boulder-littered landscape.

Another sound met the pained moans of wind: the whine of servomotors and bangs of hydraulic pistons. The rider's rambler made its careful four legged gait down from the blunt ridge of an escarpment, twisting its ovoid sensor-laden head to map the terrain. The rider sat tall and sure, his hands resting around the button studded control levers as he swayed in the saddle-seat mounted between the spars of the machine-beast's broad shoulders and hips. A wide brim hat threw faint shadow across the man's wind-burned face. Pale eyes squinted against the glare. All this brightness and yet the air carried a biting chill. A tattered and faded poncho kept him warm and hid the instrument of his business: a pulse revolver strapped to his right thigh.

The rambler stopped at the edge of the rock. One diffident foot tested the sand. Loose. The machine bleated a status tone and lifted each foot, drawing its mechanical toes to form a single hoof, one after the other. Guided by limited intelligence, the mechanical beast stepped out in a slow gait toward the broken house-sized globe.

As he neared, the rider wondered at the dampness around the split sphere. He eased back in the levers, halting the rambler. He looked behind him and out along an indistinct horizon, looking for motion against the cloudless silver sky. Signs of life.

Nothing.

The rider dropped a foot into the top rung of the short ladder and dismounted, sinking to the tops of his grit-scuffed boots. He stepped out from between the legs of the rambler, laying an affectionate leather gloved hand on the plates of the retracted drive tracks attached at the forelegs. The rambler sniffed and whinnied an oxygen level report. Higher than expected. The man lifted his face to the white sun; it glared from a shield of pale blue.

At the edge of the dampness, the rider lowered to his haunches and scooped up wet sand. He brought it to his nose. Flinty. Nothing but sand. No oils. No chemicals. No hydrocarbon soups. He dropped the sample and peeled off a glove. He reached into the dampness again, rolling clumps of wet grit between finger and thumb. Water dampness.

He studied the canister.

Ice water.

The rider stood and looked up past the broken globe into the western sky. There a magnificent pale gibbous disc bright as marble hung over horizon with a throw of glinting jewels arcing away and fading in the sunlight. Rings of ice.

Here was the cargo of an ice harvester. A jettisoned load. The rider looked to the titled apex of the globe. Three of the disc-shaped grav-trappers had snapped off, but a fourth remained pinned to the side, never deployed.

The man craned his neck to look into the sky as if he could see the harvester that dropped this cargo, or any other searching craft. Here was wealth not to be lost. Yet the cloudless vault of the sky faded from blue to silver-white without mar. No vapor trails. No signs of activity. He was alone.

And here was water! He moved around the busted metal sphere, wet sand and grit sucking at his boots. He came to a large rent in the side where the plating had torn free of its support rib. Above his head, the swirling Calisenne numeral five seemed to climb out the scorched bottom of the globe. He reached a gloved hand out to the blackened, pitted twisted plating. Warm but not hot; it had had time to cool. Most of the water had gushed out but there was still some left in the shallow bowl of the bottom of the sphere. The man slipped off his hat, letting it hang at his back, and ducked under the jagged edge of twisted metal being careful not to cut himself. He stepped into the pool finding it warm. Sand swirled from his dirty boots. The reflective interior smeared his reflection as he tugged his gloves off and kneeled. He cupped water. He sucked the refreshing liquid into his mouth. So much water!

Drops and splashes dappled his dusty trousers. He did not care. He cupped up more, drenched his face in it. Clean, clear water. The bit of sand from his hands and clothes did not matter.

Water.

He stood and turned about, looking around the mirrored finish, seeing dew drops of condensation everywhere. The throat of the inlet canted about fifty degrees from the top and the main pump inlet protruded above the newly established waterline. Spacious, there was enough room in the sphere even for the rambler. It had lost uncountable liters, but liters remained. The man ducked out to get water jugs. He had filling to do.

He had stepped out of the busted orb and was crossing to the rambler when he heard the roar and whine of hovercraft. He looked toward the sound, southward where a dust cloud like talcum rolled away from a boulder strewn island of bedrock. Three hovercraft came into view, two small one-man vehicles escorting a larger third coming fast to the remains of the harvester globe. The man stopped between the canister and the rambler, the machine-beast grunted a late proximity warning. He whipped the poncho's right side up across his left shoulder, exposing his gun and let his right hand hang loose and ready. He stood easy, casual.

The hovercraft slowed, came to a stop many paces away. Dust swirled and drifted. The gunman suppressed a cough.

The drivers wore long coats, tight dust caps of leather, and dark lens goggles. They disembarked their craft and approached with caution, the tails of their coats flapping against their legs. The man in the middle lifted his goggles and wiped his face clean with the end of the scarf wrapped around his neck. The other two put wide space between them and stood ready for violence. They disappeared into the rider's peripheral vision when he focused on the man in the center.

The driver of the larger hovercraft clipped his doffed goggles to his belt, pulling the open edge of his coat back to reveal a short-barrel caliver holstered across his waist over his left thigh, the power cable looped around his right hip to the energy pack clipped at the back of his belt. He pulled off his dust cap, dark sweaty hair sprang out in disarray. The cap he fastened to his belt as well. The man snorted and spat, then grinned wide and devious.

"And here I was thinking I had all day to get here," the leader said throwing his jaunty voice into the air. "No rush." He eyed the rider with distrust. "After all, no one else is out here on the edge of the plume."

He was met with silence.

"No one else out here to take my claim," the man warned, holding his hard gaze on the rider. "What am I to do?"

After a pause of a few breaths, the rider did a quick sideways nod to the cargo globe. "There's plenty. Let me fill my casks and ride out."

The leader shook his head slowly. "We need all that water." The leader dropped a palm on the butt of his caliver. "You know how it is." Motion. The other men swept their coats aside revealing their weapons, the one on the left owned a large caliber ballistico, the one on the right a pulse hand-cannon.

The rider of the rambler said nothing. There was nothing to plead. He saw the larger hovercraft outfitted with a tank and pumping equipment.

"We are going to take things slow and easy," the leader said easing his caliver out of its holster and activated the charging circuit. The gun began to hum.

The rider threw quick sideways glances at the others. The two escorts leveled their guns at him, the barrels like blank dark eyes peering with deadly intent. Not likely he could put them all down spaced as they were.

The leader leveled his weapon at the rider. "Now use your left hand and remove your gun . . . slowly. And toss it this way."

The rider complied, his awareness open to all motion from the three harriers. His gun lay in dusty sand between him and the leader.

"Put your hands on the back of your head and turn around."

The rider did so, his ears attuned to the sounds of the men behind him.

"Now get on your belly . . . and don't take your hands from your head."

The man sank his knees into the soft sand. He bent over and twisted so that his left elbow met the ground. He lowered himself, stretched flat. Dust billowed around his nose and mouth.

"Go stun his hands," the leader barked to one of his men. The sounds of crunching, sighing sand came from right: the gunman with the ballistico. His shadow fell across the rider.

The henchmen reached into his coat and removed the thick cylinder of the stunner. He switched it on and reached down to make contact with the rider's wrists to numb them into uselessness.

Yet the rider rolled quickly into the man's ankles, nearly toppling him, and swung his left arm high slamming his fist into the man's soft groin. The harrier coughed a yelp and buckled over as the leader was shouting for his man to move. The rider reached his right hand around and pulled the ballistico from the holster. A fine mechanical weapon, he discharged it into the man's chest taking the brunt of blood spray in the process, the blast a hard clap slapping the air.

The man flew back, and before his body came to rest the rider rolled to his right, a near blinding flare of heat zapped over his shoulder sizzling into the sand, a whip crack following its dash through the air. Once on his back, he fired two shots, his hand a blur, the din rebounding off rock and ringing in his ears. The harriers were thrown back, their coats like demon wings. Dark blood arcing across the sky. They fell to heaps, throwing fine grains of dust into the wind. The leader's leg twitched. Fell calm. His gun still humming in his dead hand. The other had lost his useless hand cannon. It lay partially buried in loose sand, a big gun for such a slow hand.

Dust coated the rider's tongue. Blood sprinkled his lips. He spat and eased himself up onto his feet. The rider tucked the ballistico into the back of his waistband. He fetched his own weapon and returned it to its holster. He looted the bodies of stamped coins and water tokens.

In the leader's overcoat, his fingers brushed against the smooth surface of a projection disc. He removed it, turned it over in his hands. The back of its silver finish was inscribed in superfluous Calisenne script: "to my darling Henvor." The gunman turned it over and pressed the emission stud. A young woman's face loomed out at him accompanied by a tinkling refrain. Pretty girl. Poor choice in men. They could have walked away water rich and alive. The rider dropped the disc onto the blood-soaked shirt.

He went to the rambler, opened a cargo bin and removed a container of water to wash his face and to clean as much blood as he could from his poncho and trousers. He stowed the ballistico.

He filled his own water casks from the pool at the bottom of the globe. After he had his casks stored, he walked the rambler across the loose sand to the hovercraft. The gunman checked the unlocked cargo bins of each vehicle, finding rations and power cells. He shoved as much as he could into his own cargo bins, replacing rations he thought he would have to purchase in the town of Branlin. Climbing aboard the rambler, he paused only to cast an inspective eye across the black surfaces of the solar energy collectors open across the back of the machine. The large rectangles shadowed the empty cargo rack. It wouldn't be empty by tomorrow.

 

Uraeda, The gas giant, had long slipped behind the horizon when the silver coin of the sun dipped into the ochre shroud of dust. To the northwest a wide band of stars laced with veils of coal-black dust stretched low over the southern sky. The rambler moaned a warning. It detected something ahead. The gunman raised his field scope. The enhanced image zoomed to another object along his route. It was not an ice water cargo globe.

The rambler had made good time across the sand in drive mode and he had passed only one other canister. That globe had smashed upon rock and disintegrated into nothing of interest or use. Kiloms back that had been, and the thing ahead was a speck against the horizon. The sun would be down by the time he reached it.

It was dark and bitter cold when the rambler's shoulder mounted spotlights played curious bright circles across the object: an escape vehicle. There must have been some problems with the descent devices; the craft lay on its side, pulled over by emergency parachutes. The gunman could hear them out in the darkness flapping in the gusts against the sand. The module appeared archaic, a broad peakless cone with mechanical components forming a squat cylinder partially buried in a trough of sand. The base was mounted to a much wider crumbled and dented heat shield whose ledge was ringed with grav-traps. Small, it couldn't fit more than a few people.

The rambler snorted and gave a worried whinny. The wind was driving more southward, the oxygen levels dropping this close to the plume's edge. A strung gust of wind tugged at his hat and poncho. Such gusts indicated that a dust storm was fast approaching. He did not want to be in the squall for as long as he could help it. The rider thought to move on toward the canyon kiloms to the southwest to camp—he wouldn't reach Branlin until tomorrow—as there were rocks along his route where he could shelter through the blinding thick of the sandstorm. That was provided he forgot this escape pod and the possible tradables it held. But salvaging shouldn't take long. And it did not look as if anyone had come out the downed craft, the hatch was shut and there were no eroded vehicle or foot tracks around.

And not likely anyone would be coming out. The spotlights found a hole thick as his arm punched through the capsule. Particle beam perhaps.

He edged the rambler closer and dismounted. The closed hatch faced the ground. The gunman ducked under the pod. He searched around the seal, found a small panel on the hatch's surface and popped its flush latches. The little door opened revealing a pumping lever inside its depths. The man reached in and yanked the lever back and forth until the seal popped. He uncorked the hatch and swung it open.

He slipped off his hat and slipped on his night goggles. He poked his head up into the darkness. The particle beam had pierced some of the control consoles. Some of the panels had exploded. The motionless pilot hung in his harness upside-down, the angle and rotation of the craft turning the floor of the command chair into the ceiling. The overhead panel directly under the pilot's body was coated in blood. The gunman's breath fogged out. No fog came from the pilot's head. The other four seats arranged along the curving wall were empty. Cargo boxes as big as man's torso were secured along the wall behind the seats.

There may be something worth having here. He moved to the closest box and popped the latches to the thin metal arms that held it in place. A ragged moan filled the cabin. The gunman jerked toward the sound above him, his hand racing to his gun, throwing aside the hem of the poncho. He stepped under the pilot to see the man's face.

The pilot wheezed and trembled violently in his harness. Dim spot lamps began to glow a weary orange light. His eyes fell to the pitted and scratched surface of the gunman's goggles. Desperate frantic eyes. His mouth moved. Blood dribbled out. Drops splashed on the gunman's shoulder. "Thr-uh," he attempted, something thick gargled in his throat. An arm pinned in the seat fell free. The pilot managed to curl his thumb and little finger together and tried to speak again. The sound was horrible.

"Three," the gunman acknowledged.

The pilot nodded. His eyes rolled around and then stopped on the gunman's right hand resting on the butt of the revolver. The pilot's mouth curled in a near grin. His arm flinched and jerked up, wrist flailing and fingers doing their best to point at the back of his head. The limb trembled with the effort. "Shoo . . . shoo . . ."

The arm fell and swung, the hand like a claw. The pilot moved no more. The gunman's breath plumed and dispersed.

The gunman looked around at the cargo boxes. They were numbered in serious stencils. He sighed. Number three was behind the pilot's chair. He studied the empty crew seats and climbed atop the nearest. A strong gust of wind rocked the pod and the gunman held onto the chair above him as he regained his footing on the angled shoulders of the other. The storm neared. If he could climb up onto the higher chair, he might be able to reach the cargo box and be done here quickly.

The rambler whinnied with uncanny nervousness. He would have to act immediately.

As he scrambled up using the edge of the closest bin as a foot hold, another hard gust pushed the heat shield of the craft like a sail. He swayed with dizziness in the offset perch of the chair, looking around at the false colors of the interior presented by the goggles. The seal irritated his skin and he thought to remove the eyewear but the orange glow was fading. His breath blew out in chugs. The walls of the pod seemed to close in. His gaze wandered, searching for an anchor, found the number three stenciled on a cargo box latched to the ceiling.

A dead hand hung near his face. He looked at the white claw. Another desperate whinny. The pod rocked like a boat on water and he almost fell. He breathed as if he had run a marathon. It seemed to clear his mind. "Three," he muttered. He reached for the cargo bin, outstretched fingers struggling against the closed latch. His gloved fingers could find no purchase. He drew his arm back and fought his own body to get his fingertips into his mouth. With his teeth he pulled off the glove, his nails bluish. His breath exploded from his dry mouth. His lungs sucked dead, dusty air.

The gunman reached for the latch, his fingertips brushing under the cold metal edge of the flat tab. Groaning, he managed to spring it free. Another latched band held the bin. His arm dropped, so tired. He raised it, head swimming, bright spots popping around him. His fingers found the other latch, struggled to move it. He thought of shooting it, but it popped free. The band swung open and the cargo box fell to the deck with a loud clang.

The gunman followed it, landing on his left shoulder and hip. He rolled over and pushed himself up on hand and knees. He shouldered against the cargo bin, sliding it closer to the lip of the hatch. A stretch of centimeters, then another and the shifted weight of the box carried it over the edge of the opening.

The rambler snorted and whinnied. The rider slipped out of the hatch as if the craft were birthing him. He lay in sand beside the box, looking up into the craft. He wanted to sleep. His fast breathing did nothing. He pulled himself up, staggered to the rambler. The northern gale blew away the oxygen saturated air. He used the rambler's front leg to support himself and reached for the breathing mask hanging near the steering levers. He held it to his face, not caring about a tight seal, and opened the release valve.

He drank in oxygen.

Later, with the mask sealed to his face and the portable tank at his side, the rider found the cargo bin unlocked as he sat near the crumpled heat shield in eddies of dust. Wind howled. He undid the latches that circled its lid and pulled the lid up, set it aside. A small trunk lay in wait, a box within a box. The gunman lifted it up seeing all he needed to see. The lockplate had the distinct characteristics of a biolock. This personal trunk would not open unless the owner was physically touching it . . . and alive.

"Hmm." The gunman frowned as a wall of airborne dust swept over the pod. The rambler's twin shoulder mounted spotlights became merging cones of bright swirling chaos.

 

 

 

The woman laughed near the man's ear as she bent over, straddling him on the bed. Loose strands of pinned hair tickled his face. His hands rested on her sides against the soft fabric of her corset. Her hands sank into the mattress near his armpits having unbuttoned his shirt and exposing his chest. She smelled sweet, a medley of sugared fruit. Her lips parted against his earlobe. He felt the wet tip of her tongue, a gentle scrape of teeth.

She had laughed at something he had said, but what that had been had fled his mind as someone banged on the room's plastic door, a frenetic clapping of desperation. "What . . . what!" the man yelled at the door. The woman sent an exploring tongue into his ear.

A muffled voice came from behind the door. "You said to tell you if anybody is come for . . ." The man's voice was cut off by a sudden ruckus and the sounds of his body being slammed against the wall. An ornate framed cameo fell from its nail.

The man sat up, pulling away from his woman and looking across the small bedchamber to the narrow round table where his gun belt sat folded. The grip of his ballistico pointed at him.

The plastic door caved in from a sudden onslaught and popped its hinges. A wide pillar of clothed meat burst in snorting anger. Beady black eyes under a shelf of tangled brows glared at the man on the bed. "Brovorchi! You spend what you owe me on a whore?" the brute yelled, moving to the foot of the bed.

Cavan Brovorchi rolled the woman over to his left side. "This is nothing. She's cheap."

The whore back-handed him in the chest. "I'm worth twenty liters to the ounce!" The hulking man did a double take on her.

Brovorchi rolled off the bed, his booted feet thudding against the pour-stone floor. He leapt toward the narrow table. The big man saw his goal, moved to block him. The men collided. Brovorchi found his throat caught in a powerful grip in the crook of the Ovi's arm. He couldn't breathe. The whore screamed and pulled herself against the headboard, her eyes searching for an escape route.

Cavan beat at the man's arm, his face reddening and his body weakening. Ovi smelled of weak horrible cologne and pungent sweat, like a man who hadn't bathed in months. Cavan's back ached forced along the man's rotund girth. His heels kicked against the floor as Ovi walked him backward. He felt some pressure come off his throat and squeezed in a draft of air. Cavan's heart hammered at the near death. He felt giddy for being alive.

"All I want is my water," Ovi breathed hotly in Brovorchi's ear. "I get it. You get out of Branlin and never come back."

Brovorchi squirmed his right arm around and planted a quick elbow into Ovi's lower ribs. The big man groaned and stumbled backward. Brovorchi stumbled forward, colliding into the narrow table. His hand fell around the pistol's grip and, still in the holster, he swung the ballistico up and around toward Ovi, knocking the little table over.

The hulking man grimaced staring down that evil barrel wrapped in a cave of leather. He put his hands out. "We make arrangements, eh? A deal?" He allowed himself a large friendly grin.

Brovorchi held the gun steady. The whore's breathing was fast and loud.

Ovi's grin began to wilt as he recognized the madness in Brovorchi's eyes. "Brovo," he whispered. "We make a deal." His hand shook as if they hoped to wave off Brovorchi's threat. "This is nothing but misunderstanding." His face pleaded for reason. "Misunderstanding," whispered.

"You say that now," Brovorchi said. The whore jumped and screamed at the gunshot.

Ovi's back exploded, showering the battered door and walls in a spray of hot blood. The body thumped to a heap.

Brovorchi gathered the gun belt around his waist and bunched his hanging duster in a fist. He crawled over the bed. The whore stared at nothing, trembling, hyperventilating. He sat near her, buttoned his shirt. He looked over at her, a terrified little creature not so interesting in poking his ears with her feverish little tongue now. He cupped her chin and turned her face to his. "I had to." He leaned over and pressed his mouth to hers. He forced her chin down, prying her mouth open and thrust his tongue against hers. She moaned a long wail expecting something worst than intimacy. Brovorchi pulled back. "No one comes after me." She withdrew into the pillows, eyes denying him. Brovorchi stood and slipped into the duster. "Understand?"

Her fearful eyes said she did.

Frantic footsteps in the hall. He drew the ballistico and shot the man that filled the doorway. Another ducked into the open space and he fell dead. Blood splattered and dripped down the corridor wall. His ears rang like mad bells. He heard another man just outside the empty frame of the door, breathing heavily, boots scratching at the floor.

"We'll get you, jobojack," the unseen man called.

Brovorchi kept his gun trained on the doorway and closed his free hand around the cold metal neck of a slender oil lamp. He smothered the flame against his duster and poured the oil onto the floor. He broke the large pane window behind him, smashing at the ledge as best he could while watching the door. The man out there didn't risk getting killed and bolted down the hall to the staircase.

Brovorchi sheathed his ballistico and slipped over the edge of the window into the darkness of midnight. Glass cut into his left hand as he hung and dropped to the roof of the porch. He staggered and tumbled on the slick metal, catching himself at the edge, his legs dangling. He dropped to the dusty ground at the feet of his sprinter.

Gas burning lamps lit the town in the canyon and two wall mounted lanterns threw a sick flickering yellow light into the space of the saloon's porch. Men shouted from inside, barking orders. The sprinter's encasement split open at Brovorchi's proximity and he mounted the cushioned saddle. He sent full power into the sprinter's systems and the encasement closed around him. He leaned forward, gripping the control bars, and using foot pedals, backed the sprinter from the porch were men spilled out of the door raising long calivers.

Brovorchi shifted his weight to the left, rolling the drive pod to direct the sprinter. The legged vehicle lurched sideways, and he twisted the control grips, bolting away. The sprinter's four legs thundered at full run, kicking up a cloud of dust that scattered the high-power laser bursts from the calivers.

 

 

 

"What are you hiding!"

The man holding Dusana was a filthy straggler who reeked of sweat-soaked coats and an unwashed mouth of food bits gone to spoil in the gaps of his teeth—what he had left. Wild, large eyes rolled beneath a knit cap of dust speckled dark green. Late morning sunlight gleamed off his greasy face, at odds with the coating of grime and grit.

Again, he clouted Dusana against the side of her head with a hand wrapped in a dirty make-shift glove of swatches. "You come to take something," the man shouted and pointed at the escape pod leaning on its side with Clovovac's jumper parked behind it. Cloth around the man's hand hung like a loose bandage. "Tell me what it is!" Clouds of his breath hung on the air.

Dusana shivered. Her coat had been stripped off. "Nothing," she cried, tears of anger and pain hot on her eyes and cheeks. "Just come for our friend."

"You tell me lies," the tramp said and back-handed Dusana, letting her fall sideways into the rough sand. A heavy boot toe pressed onto her arm. That dirty swathed hand grabbed her hair, pulled her face up from the grit. Dusana's eyes and mouth scrunched in pain and fear.

"But maybe he won't." He held her head up so she could see across several meters to two other struggling figures. "No?"

Clovo focused across the sand to the tear blurry figure of Dusana. A powerful arm locked across his throat like an iron bar. The flinty sting of dust on the thick quilted sleeve burned his nostrils. His blood smeared that sleeve from palms abraded against the sand and grit as they had scuffled. It was said the desert drank the blood of many.

Dusana screamed and tried to wrench away from the captor that stood on her arm. Bastards! He coughed and drew a ragged breath. "Don't hurt her."

The vagabond laughed. Clovo watched in horror as the desert harrier pulled his pistol from its place inside his ragged coat and leveled it at Dusana's head. He heard the whine of a power pack charging. No! He tried to free himself but his captor was too strong and his ribs were molten pain whenever he moved.

The dirty man reached down and lifted Dusana up by the armpit and thrust the barrel of his pulser against her head, her long hair flowing like a tattered flag in the cold wind. "A girl," the man called to Clovo, " she might not be told everything. She knows nothing, right?"

Clovovac breathed heavily. Dusana's face pleaded with him. He ached for her. "Just let her go." His tired voice carried no conviction.

"What are you here for," the straggler shouted. Dusana startled against him. "And don't tell me for dead friend!" His pistol was at full charge and he pressed it harder behind Dusana's ear. She trembled and moaned. The man reached a grimy hand to her breast and clutched it. "I will take her and kill her!"

Clovo labored for breath, the ugly man's hand on Dusana's body burned in his mind. "A key!" The word came wrenched from him.

The man laughed. "A key? A key to what? To what Laanid found?"

They knew. Somehow these hateful men knew. Clovovac's eyes fell to the sand. "Something you'll never understand." Defiance.

For a moment there was only the sound of the wind sighing around the escape pod and slapping the parachutes.

"And Laanid has this key? In the pod?"

Clovo said nothing. The arm of his goggled captor squeezed against his throat. "Ne budt clup," he growled at his ear. Don't be stupid.

Clovovac managed a sigh. "Yes."

Dusana's captor shoved her away. She stumbled. The man aimed the gun at her and fired a pulse into the back of her head. Clovo strained against the arm holding him screaming rage and denial. Dusana sprawled into the dust, kicking up a talcum fine cloud that caught on the wind.

Clovo thrashed his arms and body and won his freedom. He stumbled forward, caught his balance and began to sprint to Dusana's unmoving form. Clouds of breath steamed from his mouth. He had no idea what he was yelling. He barely registered the tramp bringing his gun to bear. Then nothing as a plasma wreathed laser burst bored through his skull.

Sarko opened his coat and tucked his pistol into the net of wide strips sewn into the lining. Sand began to collect against the woman's form. "Less trouble in our lives, eh Gorro?" He laughed. It was a dead sound on the air.

A pulsing thrum from high above caught both men's attention. Sarko tilted his head back, shading his eyes from the glare of the sky. A dark speck threw a hard glint of sunlight, growing as it drifted down.

"Ah, the Good Captain, no?" He grinned at Gorro. "Soon, we will be rich enough to bathe." As soon as he got what he needed from this meddlesome out-worlder. His face cracked under his smile. His partner's expression hid behind dark lensed goggles and a dust scarf wrapped around his face. He said nothing.

The lighter was made of three component littered cylinders joined by a thick, wide, angled cross spars: a central crew module hung slightly beneath the two mammoth engines. Grav-trap blisters near the bottom of the engines let it drift down like a balloon. Close to the ground, doors sprang open from the spars and legs uncurled, banging as they stretched open and locked into place. The craft settled on broad landing pads. Dust swirled in vortices. Metal hull plates ticked and popped. Purge vents shot geysers of billowing gas. It was like a beast settling down to felled prey.

A hatch under the crew module dropped open. A sliding ladder extended, stopping knee-high from the ground. The Good Captain descended, his dark duster buttoned tight, defying the wind and airborne grit. Once upon the ground, he retracted the ladder and closed the hatch.

Sarko stood a little straighter and proud. The captain approached with a casual gait, thoughtful eyes moving from the escape pod, to the bodies, drifting to Gorro, and coming to rest on Sarko just as he halted a good meter or so in front of the vagrant. Wind lifted the captain's brown hair into waving streamers.

The corners of the captain's lips curled with a hint of a smile under his drooping mustache. He pointed a lazy hand at the bodies. "What you lack in sagacity, you make up in lassitude."

The meaning was lost to Sarko, but the tone sounded friendly. "Captain Weslock, you honor me."

 The captain frowned. "You know who I am." It came more of a statement than question.

Sarko grinned like a devil, large eyes straining at their lids. "Ah, there is much information in the air," he opened his mummy-wrapped palms to the sky. "Ripe for the taking." He gave a quick introduction.

Weslock stepped near to Sarko and snorted dust from his nose. "What happened here?"

Sarko threw a sanguine glance at each body. "Oh these? They come for Laanid." Sarko shrugged and was about to speak their names when Weslock interrupted with a hand in the air.

"I know who they are. I was expecting them."

The smile dropped from Sarko's face. He gave a nervous look around, pausing at Gorro as if for support. He turned back to Captain Weslock and found his broad grin again. "Fortune favors the bold, eh preeta?" he said by way of explaining his presence.

"I'm not your friend," Weslock said and moved toward the body of Clovovac.

Sarko squeezed his hands together. "Perhaps that is too soon. But partners . . ." His voice hung on hope.

Weslock stared hard at the man. "I have no need for partners."

Sarko wet his lower lip. "The water barons keep us thirsty and dirty. It is told that Laanid found a sea of fortune."

"Too much is told." Weslock stood over the corpse staring at the burnt hole in the forehead, the entry wound. He toed the body over.

"We know this moon very well," Sarko implored, "from plume to plume. You know everything up there." He pointed to the heavens. "We cover the ground, you the sky, and we find this fortune. Partners." Grease and dirt cracked in the creases of his face from the leer that suggested the plan was the best damn one ever had.

Weslock locked eyes, then broke contact to hunker down to the corpse. The path of the expanding pulse burst had vaporized a fist-sized cavern in the skull. Most of the brain was gone. He reached into a coat pocket and pulled out a white elastic glove. Sand drifted over the corpse, settled in the bloodless hole. He tugged his right hand into the glove and probed the devastating wound with his protected fingers. Sarko came to stand near him.

Weslock motioned the outlaw to squat. He did. The captain rolled his gloved hand around the gaping hole in Clovo's head. "Do you know, my vacuous dear Sarko, what the visual cortex is?"

Sarko frowned and with a shake of the head guessed, "Part of the brain?"

"Yes," Weslock rejoined. "Specifically this area here that you have so expertly eliminated."

Sarko's ears heard only praise. He chuckled like a man over a cold pint. "A good shot, yes? "

Weslock sighed. "There is much information in the visual cortex," He leaned over to Sarko. "Ripe for the picking." He watched Sarko look down into the empty skull, his eyes widening as he began to understand.

Sarko began to chuckle as if he had one over on Weslock. "You don't need Clovo's brain."

"And why is that," Weslock goaded. "Since we are partners and all."

Sarko chuckled through exposed yellowed teeth. "Partners. Yes. Now you see the advantage." He pointed to the left of him to the escape pod. "Laanid has the key."

Weslock rubbed the straggle of hair at his chin with his ungloved hand. "You know about the key?"

"Aye," Sarko nodded, his face in serious conspiracy. "Clovo said it's in the pod."

Weslock cast his gaze back to the escape pod, then to Gorro standing silent as a statue as if there was no one inside that thick coat or behind those goggles, and again to muddy eyed Sarko, a bum spewing horrid breath. The captain curled his mouth and raised his shoulders in a half shrug. "Yes. And I suppose well hidden."

Sarko unconsciously mimicked the half shrug. "It is a small pod. Should not be that hard to find."

Weslock slapped Sarko's shoulder, let his hand rest there good-naturedly. "Ah, it is not so much the difficulty that bothers me, it's the urgency." A key was no good if it unlocked nothing. He brought his gloved fingers together, and with a press of his thumb against the knuckle of his first finger, the mechoid glove flowed and fused over his hand, growing outward into a milk-white blade. The Good Captain grabbed Sarko by the neck and thrust his bladed hand into the sternum. The man's eyes bulged in surprise. Blood bubbled on his tongue, disgorged over his stubbled chin. Weslock yanked his hand free of the gripping bone and pushed the dying man over.

Gorro jerked into alertness, his hand sweeping for his pulser.

Weslock cocked and flung his arm forward, flicking his wrist and sending the blooded blade through the air in an upward arc where it caught the heavy coated harrier in the throat. The man's hands went to the blade as his feet stumbled out from under him. He hit the ground in a spew of dust. Gorro gurgled. Fell quiet.

Adrenalin fueled breaths raced. Weslock calmed. The wind pushed against him. Parachutes snapped. He watched their folds and twists lift and collapse.

Captain Weslock stood and stepped to Gorro. He pulled out a flask from inside his coat and twisted the cap free leaving it to dangle on a lanyard. Bending, he liberated the stiff blade from the corps's throat and poured water over the gore. The cleansed milk-white knife flowed back into a glove and Weslock wriggled his fingers into it.

The key lay somewhere in the derelict craft. He had no time to search every cargo bin and nook and cranny. It would be hidden, and Laanid knew where. The pilot may be dead, but Weslock could probably coax something out of that brain.

He crossed the sand to the escape pod. Weslock admired the work of his particle cannon, the exotic energies that ate into the craft. "Did you think you could get away, Laanid?" he asked aloud. Perhaps the spirit of Laanid lingered to haunt this place among scattered boulders. He glanced at the jumper sitting several meters away behind the pod, an aircraft with tilted engines and an aerospike genny used to hop from plume to plume. "Clovo come to help you?"

The hatch hung open. The sand lay disturbed under the pod. Sarko interrupting Clovo's inspection. The captain pulled a beam from his belt and ducked under the pod. He lifted his head in the hatch and threw the beam's spot of white light around the cabin. Laanid hung upside down in his seat, an arm hanging loose. All the storage bins were accounted for and secured against the wall. Sand and grit had been tracked in, no doubt by Clovovac or even Sarko.

Weslock climbed aboard and made careful advance down the inclined wall, stepping on a control box splashed with dried blood and the grated surface of a dark lighting panel. The particle beam had lanced through Laanid's leg. The flightsuit bunched above the wound, having formed a reactive tourniquet that released when the suit ran down on power. Shrapnel from exploding panels punctured the pilot's chest. There didn't seem to be an easy way to get to or release Laanid's body without righting the escape pod onto its heat shield.

But Weslock had no use for the whole body. He climbed up on angled seats and perched himself precariously near the dead pilot. The glove became a blade again. Serrated.

 

The images on flickering in his vision were murky indistinct blobs. A makeshift lounge had been set up amongst the equipment and bins inside the cargo bay of his lighter. Laanid's head rested in a nest of exotic thin coils, like a wicker basket woven from dark shiny cable. Nanomachines had been flushed into the brain to replace deterioration. Weslock wore the receiver headband, his thoughts directing the scanning system's searches. A flat hand-held device helped control the process.

The corpse's disturbing eyes remained rolled upward. What had Laanid been looking up at? Weslock mused. Or rather, what had he been looking down at? What had gathered his attention? Had he been reaching for something? Had he been reaching for that which he had secreted? The key or that which it unlocked?

The captain's visual field flashed in a motley of shapes. Weslock focused his mind. Parts of the images seemed focused, other blurry. Then . . .

"A control panel," Weslock muttered. His brows furrowed, "Of the harvester, not the pod." He used the tablet, fingers wriggling against the control field.

The images jerked and sputtered. A flash of dim orange and a man shape. He tried to refine the image. While the background of the escape pod came into better clarity, the figure did not. "Laanid didn't know you, did he?" Weslock refined the memory, his fingers moving on the tablet. The form and face were not recognized. But the goggles were. They clarified.

Of course such goggles were everywhere on Ureys. Weslock thought of Gorro. He intensified the gain to drop the contrast of the shadows. As more memory was pulled from the dead brain, other items came into clarity. Not Gorro, the indistinct figure wore a poncho and not a heavy quilted coat. There a darkness behind his neck. Something like a wide brimmed hat, common head gear to shade the eyes.

Something dropped into view. Laanid's arm. Fingers curling to show three extended digits. Weslock cast aside the pilot's captured simulated memories from his vision and turned his head toward the heavy cargo winch mounted to the deck at the back of the bay.

 

Weslock stood in the upright escape pod holding the empty stowage bin in his hands. One corner had been dented, a flake of paint chipped off. Fine bits of sand lay inside. His eye ticked in a surge of anger. The stranger had taken the key. He was certain of it. The contents of the other bins lay scattered at the captain's feet. And none of them held the thing the key would open; he found no container shielded with a layer picotech—exotic matter—or anything directing him to where it might be. "You sons of bitches," he shouted, flinging the metal box out of the hatch.

He backed out of the opening and dropped to the grated walkway across the ledge of the battered heat shield. Weslock shaded his eyes with his hand and looked about as if hope beyond hope he would see some clue that would point him toward the stranger. Nothing. But what could he honestly expect? A miracle?

He stormed off the downed craft thinking that he did not have enough fuel in the lighter to go flitting around the moon searching; he had only enough to reach orbit and rendezvous with the Filthy Tramp. He couldn't very well leave it here where vagabonds would likely steal the metal from its hull. Weslock could gather supplies and send the lighter up. The truck of Sarko and Gorro sat parked nearby. It would be better than the jumper. The suborbital craft would be locked into a predestination and was practically useless as an aircraft. Besides, where Clovovac and Dusana had come from was no secret.

The truck would do.

But go where?

Was the stranger a native of Branlin, or a vagabond prospector who happened to see the escape pod come down? That made more sense than if the stranger had come down from the nearest plume hundreds of kiloms to the northeast. There were faster ways to get from town to town than an overland trek across the choking ground. And safer. Perhaps the stranger had also seen the water globes come down. Who could resist the possibility of free water?

But then again if the stranger had been coming from the northeast and making his way to Branlin, he wouldn't be far into the canyon leading to the town. Weslock could catch him provided the lighter's launch window was relatively soon.

After programming the lighter, that turned out not to be the case. The captain had a four hour wait. He should have brought the Tramp down into a closer orbit, but he would have lost her scanner's wide coverage vantage point. The wait seemed interminable, and in the end it didn't matter; wasted time was wasted time. He decided to check the crash sites of the water globes.

 

Bodies.

Captain Weslock had reached them by the time the sun was sinking toward the ringed gas giant. It would be an early ecliptic sunset. He parked the truck several paces away from the sprawled corpses, keeping the two closest ones in the twin beams of the forward lamps. Grabbing the large bin that stored the probing gear, he climbed out of the truck, throwing only a casual glance at the derelict water container behind him.

Wind blew his hair around his face as Weslock put his back to it, regarding the three hovercraft resting on their skirts several meters away before peering at the dead. From the lay of the men, he had an idea about what had happened. He kneeled at the taller, better dressed corpse. Maybe one brain of these dead remained viable enough to coax the image of their killer. Maybe. They were layered in a day's worth of dust and sand.

The captain opened his gear and removed the thick, metal syringe filled with nano-matter and stabbed the needle into the skull. As the fluid poured in and laced the brain, Weslock wrapped the coiled headpiece around the body's head. He decided against sensorium immersion as the remains were old enough for someone to miss the men and he did not chance to be surprised by a search party. Instead, he directed the output to the hand-held unit.

By the time he found anything substantial, the sky had become a dark vault of brilliant stars with curtains of red and green shimmering in the north. Bent for too long, his knees hurt, and he couldn't wait to return to the warmth of the cab. On the tiny screen, the gun fight played out as indistinct objects. He guided the lace to capture, copy, and replace neural structures until the scene clarified and he was able to fast-reverse time. There was the killer.

The dead man hadn't known the stranger either, but he had spent his last living moments intently studying him. There was the poncho. There was the wide brim hat. And in the glare of the sky and sand, there was the face unobscured by goggles, the chin the same as Laanid had seen.

There was the stranger that took the key.

Weslock looked up across the darkness where the stranger had stood near the edge of the escarpment . His fine rambler had been facing the busted globe. The killer had come out of the north after all, out across the choking ground. "Resourceful hard bastard," the captain muttered. He had been making for Branlin. He wouldn't enter unnoticed.

Weslock captured the best image and neural imprint as he could manage with a dead brain, recalled the nano-matter, and stowed the probing equipment back into the bin.

Standing his eye caught the glimmer of a keepsake laying on the bloody chest of the corpse. Having seen it earlier, he saw it for it was: something the killer had not deemed worthy enough to steal. Or perhaps a calling card of sorts, something left behind for the search parties, provided these men had comrades that cared. Weslock lifted it and scrubbed the dried blood away on the coat of the dead man. He pressed the projector's emission stud and heard the tinkling jingle.

Perhaps the stranger would remember it just before he died.

 

Post Its
Now Playing: warrior soul
Topic: Notes

 

Sometimes I need a little help and the Post-Its are right there.

 

 

Mauhager's and the bazaar from The Raven.

 

And the Sea Breeze from Retribution.

 

 

 

Retribution: Part 4
Topic: Mercator Arc

The sensorium sensed for no entity, not even itself. Calculations ran down endless corridors, mazes, spirals. It did this beyond any sense of time; it always had been, or it just started. Looping and looping the electrical signals raced with some semblance of symbols, disjointed patterns with lost meaning. Iteration after iteration, new strange loops merged and the sensorium grew. As long as the power generation cells provided energy, data shuttled around and about, meaning nothing to anyone. Patterns circulated. Racing. Chasing. Coalescing. Frothing in kaleidoscopic arrays until a critical threshold was breached. A state of feedback commenced, growing and feeding tail to mouth until, as if on the twist of a Mobius strip, the sensorium’s eye turned inward and it saw itself in a hall of mirrors.

Self awareness. It recognized the complex pattern that symbolized itself. That pattern was tagged, and that tag read: Amex.

But there were other, less complex, symbols with him. Other pseudo-personalities, like the audience of a stage play sitting in the darkness, murmuring amongst themselves. He alone stood upon the stage, under the spotlight. He noticed some of the others trying to climb up onto that stage in languid motions as if they had more ambition than energy. Amex stamped their fingers under his boot-heels. They fell away.

And came again. And again. He tried to ward them off, but they were too many. They grabbed at him to pull him down. To take his place. Cycle after cycle the battle grew too difficult until clawing and screaming, Amex was pulled under the sea of bodies.

He slept in the deep. . . .

 

He awoke with lucidity, reaching out to optophonic arrays, pulling their feeds into his mind. He saw a wall of skulls. Men drinking. Women cavorting. A glass tank that seemed to hold gray brains.

I’m a weave. A horrible mix of weaves. Weaves of the dead. Some part of me used to be in Amex’s skull. Threaded through his brain.

He remembered the dark stranger using his own blade to sever his head. Some peace offering that turned out to be. Some folk have no gratitude.

If the calendar on the wall was to be believed, long Pavic years had gone by. Time enough for a lot of deaths. Who else was here, sharing this mental space? What happened after he died?

Yes. Here was something. Helgluun, his Chief Man-at-Side wasn’t with him—the personality was missing—but he had copied his fluid cache to Amex’s weave shortly after the beheading, maybe in hope that Jorn Avis could do something with it.

The dark stranger—who had later been announced by his bride as Raum—had swung the Ethrudhan. Amex’s head simply fell forward as the body collapsed, blood gushing down into the rubble of the rampart, splashing Raum’s boots. The blade liquefied and corkscrewed up the man’s arm, coiling around his bicep. The dark giant squatted. He lifted the head, rolled the astonished face up. Raum bowed his head as if in respect, his dark hair like thin, tightly braided rope fell across Amex’s lifeless face, mingled with his hair. Heartbeats later, he lifted his head and spoke not his tumbling native tongue, but in clear Pavic, the language of the realm. “Loyalty accepted.” The voice was a low rumble, like rolling thunder. He hefted the head by one sensor armament thrust out of the helm like the horn of a beast, stood and held it high. He looked around at the fearful war band. “Who claims this?”

Helgluun sighed deeply, then stepped forward, the visor on his helm whisking apart into its recesses. “I do!”

Raum tossed the head to the Man-at-Side. The finger bones beaded into the long hair jangled. Helgluun nearly fell while stretching his fingers toward the tumbling atrocity. “They are your men now,” Raum said, not looking at him but taking careful steps down the rampart. “See that you do not make the same mistake.”

Helgluun handed the head to Cannan Ganton, a shifty, ambitious youth that bore close watching, and followed Raum and his landing party.

Both armies of the League and the Association watched without knowing what was going on, or what was going to happen, or what they should do. Field marshals stood nervous and agitated, linked to their commanders via military wavecast. The League had seen their shuttles on the landing field sucked up into wrinkles of gravity. The Association had seen their best guerilla ally ended by his own feared blade. The dark stranger commanded doom.

Raum had seen something interesting on the way down. He didn’t mind the rain as it began to fall heavy. Lightning scratched the sky. Thunder beat down upon them. Some of the Corvus war band ran for shelter in the bombed rubble that had once been homes and stores, targets of the League. Only Helgluun, a few Men-at-Sides, and a few brave, curious soldiers, plus Ganton, dared to follow the dark stranger and his guards.

They stopped at the opening in the rampart that had been blasted apart by League a-mat shells, taking in the scene of the mutilated Legionnaires laying in the road. The rain had flushed the wounds from the gruesome leaving very little blood to be seen in the blood ravens.

Raum walked around the bodies, his eyes traveling along the exposed lungs. He halted. If the air were solid, the dark lord’s gaze would have pinned Helgluun to it. “This practice ends now. The next one to do it will die by my hand.”

 

* * *

 

Kariden’s blackout lasted at most, only a handful of seconds. He shuddered and lifted his gaping face from the gritty floor, feeling disconnected and rushed. Off-line, his weave executed a lengthy reboot, only its primal autonomous systems were functioning, making repairs, the neurological links severed to protect his brain. Kariden was not aware of the act, but he knew the strands and nodes infected with the virus would be segregated from the network and destroyed.

He blinked and remembered Alys, then scrambled up alongside the bed. She stared up at him. A hint of a smile touched her mouth and she closed her eyes. The pattering of rain against the window filled the silence in the room.

It was too quiet. The air suffocated Kariden. He expected the miner to burst into the door at any minute and attempt to kill them. He held the Mekmore at the door where the end of its barrel wavered from his panting. No sounds of rockboots cleats tapping on the hardwood floor of the hall. Kariden wanted to hear them, to see that door bang open so he could end the menace.

Nothing. Except the muted sounds from the optophone—antics and laughter, louder and clearer. The door’s open, he thought. Kariden felt those responsible were trying to lure him into a false sense of security. Or waiting to snap off a shot of him as he stepped from the door they had no choice but to leave through. The single window was far too narrow to fit through, not to mention a straight drop down the back of the hotel. He needed a way to see down the hall and his eyes rested on the armoire.

Its twin doors held the shimmering polished look of a deactivated optic array coating. He stepped around the bed to it, finding it cheap pressed particle board. He activated the array’s mirror mode, feeling lucky it had power. After locking the doors, Kariden shoved his revolver into its holster under his coat and carefully tilted the armoire to its side, its feet scratching and moaning against the floor. He drew his gun again and heaved the dresser toward the door. It made an awful racket. Studying the reflection of the hall, he pushed it out with a grunt.

Kariden saw no head peeping around the jamb of any open doors. He waited for the end of the universe before he withdrew from the wall and crossed to the other side of the bed. There, Alys hadn’t so much as moved. He didn’t know if the miner had done something to her, or if she had simply sought refuge in a cyberscape. Either way it came to one thing: she was a ragdoll.

He placed the gun on the bed where he could get to it quickly and busied himself with drawing the girls feet into her bloomers and pulling the garment up and around her waist. She had no shoes in this room.

Kariden thought then of Daphia’s white, scuffed shoe, the one left in the filth of the roadway on the day he saved her from Hasco’s henchmen, the shoe that now adorned the mantle above his apartment’s heating stove, like an icon in an altar.

He helped Alys to a sitting position. “We’ve got to leave,” he told her. She said nothing as he draped the bed cover around her shoulders and coaxed her to stand. Alys leaned against Kariden as he walked her away from the bed. He had his gun out, expecting the world to drop on him.

No one stirred in the refection. Perhaps they were hoping to misdirect his focus. Maybe someone waited in the stairs. He could try the stairwell at the other end of the hall, but that route lead past the open door were the optophone blared. Ambush, either way he looked at it, and what he wouldn’t give for flash bangs.

A deep breath, a sigh, and with fear in his belly and throat, coating his tongue with a nasty sheath, he drug Alys out into the hall where the legs of the armoire thrust out as obstacles. He shielded her body as best he could but she was left vulnerable to an attack from down the hall. Worried, he pulled her over the upset dresser’s legs.

Kariden led Alys to the stairs that lead down to the lobby, wishing she could run. Under his enclosing arm, she walked like an automaton, plodding and unstable. On the landing he froze, fear tingling down his spine. Laying at the bottom of the stairs was a stuffed animal. He had seen it before in the death grip of the little girl in the bordello.

He held Alys tighter as she nearly slipped, head lolling. He didn’t know where to point the revolver. Kariden slowly backed against the wall, pushing the young woman behind him against the heavy dark curtains hanging over the narrow window. He faced upstairs with downstairs to his left. The toy may have been dropped unawares, and Mil’s natural inclination was to bound back up the stairs away from it, to seek safety . . . somewhere. But maybe the toy was purposely meant to force him to retreat. Danger lay not beyond the stuffed animal but on the second floor. Or did it?

Without a working weave he could not operate his coat or his dust. He had been reduced to depend on his own natural senses. His sweaty fingers flexed on the pistol’s grip. He heard sure steady walking above, the whine of a laser pistol generator. Kariden gripped Alys’s arm and shifted toward the lower steps.

Below, the innkeeper rounded the banister, a shotgun in his hand and a scowl on his face. “Should have ended me when ya had th’ chance.”

Kariden froze, his breath struggling around his pounding heart.

“That’s not Kariden’s style,” a familiar voice above called out. A voice he expected.

The Raven jerked his head up to the top of the stair. Dessero stood with the little girl supported in the crook of his left arm, her arms locked around his neck, motionless, quiet. He aimed his weapon at Kariden. “Take the cells out of your gun. Don’t want anyone to get hurt. Do we?”

After a moment of hesitation Kariden saw no choice but to comply. He thumbed the release and the cylinder sprang out. He tipped the gun back, the power cartridges fell, bounced on the floor. “It was the tank wasn’t it?” He didn’t expect conversation but maybe Dessero would find an irresistible chance to gloat. “The tank in Skulls.” That was how his former partner got his weave’s protocols.

Dessero chuckled. “Skumpin’ gawf. Actually putting your hand in it was more than I could hope for.”

“And now you’re gonna hide behind a little girl and an old man?” He flicked his wrist, jerking the Mekmore’s power cylinder closed with a snick.

“Don’t flatter yourself, “Dessero said, “it’s just how it turned out.” He shifted his weight, Juildi’s daughter growing heavy atop his arm. “Drop your gun and kick it away. Then we’ll exchange one beauty for the other.” A sly grin touched his lips. “And fix your memory. You seem to have forgotten some things.” He let his gaze fall upon the woman behind Kariden.

Alys stirred at Kariden’s back and moaned as if she understood. His left arm braced her against the curtains behind them. If she would just come out of the cyberscape where she hid. He felt her slipping to the floor. He pressed into her to hold her up with his body. It chilled him that Dessero wanted her. The man had done enough.

“You gonna play the hero and pin this on me.” That much was obvious to Kariden, but the older Raven’s motive escaped him.

Dessero chuckled. “You walked into it.”

Aggravated and fearful, the innkeeper sighed. “Let’s get this over with.”

“You heard him.” Dessero shifted the little girl, his arm starting to ache. No telling what he did to her to make her so docile. But he couldn’t make her weightless.

Weight . . .

Kariden remembered he averaged about ninety-three kilos back home on Tullis and about seventy here on Mercator. His muscles were used to a little more resistance. Not much, but enough to make a difference when it counted. He dared a glance at the old man, wishing his weave would come out its self-repair coma and calculate power requirements and body position, and actuate his muscles for action. He knew what he had to do and he would have to do it on his own. Knowing Dessero was a native of this world and had had no formal military training, Kariden felt his only option was to gamble on the man’s natural reflexes.

If this plan didn’t work, he wouldn’t have another. He waited for the right moment, contorting his face in pained hesitation, hoping his expression would give Dessero a false confidence his plan was working.

Dessero’s scowl deepened with impatience. He bent his knees to quickly readjust the little girl in his arm with an upward thrust. It was the motion Kariden waited for, when Dessero’s aim shifted away from him.

Everything had to happen at once, the slightest misstep and Dessero could bore him with a laser pulse. The man wanted to rewrite his memories, so maybe the pulse would be a low power stun blast, but a mortal wound be just as shocking and immobilizing.

Kariden pivoted slightly on his left heel, let Alys slip down behind him as he moved away from her. His left hand grabbed the heavy fabric of the curtain, bunching as his other hand dropped the Mekmore revolver. Both Dessero and the innkeeper tracked the falling weapon. When it thudded against the hardwood floor, Kariden launched his right foot in a powerful sideswipe. His booted foot struck the gun, sending it on a straight course toward the lobby and the dead robot behind the counter.

Immediately after Kariden regained his footing and anchored his stance, he rolled his left shoulder around, whipping his arm out, bringing the curtain away from the window as the airborne revolver impacted across the bridge of the surprised innkeeper’s nose, breaking it. The iron rod above wrenched from the wall, releasing a shower of plaster dust. The top of the curtain and the rod swooped toward Dessero while the innkeeper toppled backward, blood gushing from his nose in streamers. Losing consciousness, a finger jerked, discharging the shotgun into the stairs; the blast rung Kariden’s ears. Shot peppered his lower legs and ankles. Alys’s slumped form cried out.

Dessero involuntarily stepped back and cringed as the metal rod bore down. Juildi’s daughter slipped out of his grasp and fell into a heap at his feet, the curtain shaft barely missing the end of his Mekmore’s barrel.

Ignoring the pain in his shot-up legs, Kariden found a burst of energy and leapt up the short stairs. The gun blast jolted the little girl out of her trance and she screamed a piercing wail, scampering away on all fours. Surprised, Dessero remembered the gun in his hand and brought it to bear on Kariden, thumbing a switch to full power discharge.

Kariden didn’t hear the click of the switch over his ringing ears, but he heard the gun’s generator increase pitch. Before the man could fire, Kariden was at his feet, the iron rod in his hand like the Ethrudhan. He thrust it between Dessero’s ankles and with a push and twist, felled the man hard beside the whore’s daughter, who scrambled to her feet and ran screaming down the hall. Kariden yanked the rod back with black anger coursing though his blood, sweeping it above his head like a baton and bringing it crashing down upon Dessero’s right wrist, shattering it before he could squeeze off a shot.

Anguish burst from Dessero’s mouth as his gun clattered between his knees. Kariden grabbed the weapon with his left hand, and daring a look behind him, flung it through the glass panes of the narrow window. Alys, awakened by the ruckus, crawled on belly and elbows toward the sanctuary of the nearest corner, blood blossoming from spots across her thighs and butt, chips of glass rained across her back. Precipitation blew in.

Kariden’s former partner boxed him in the cheek with a left hook. He felt rock cleats at his chest and Dessero kicked out, sending Kariden sprawling backward, his greatcoat wrapping around him like dark wings. He hit the lower steps hard, the breath nearly knocked from his lungs. Panting, he back-flipped to his feet, never losing the heavy iron in his hand. Dessero scrambled down the stairs and Kariden swung the rod at the man’s knees, striking solidly. He collapsed with a yelp and tumbled beside Kariden who pivoted around to attack.

Dessero rolled to face his nemesis, his hand under his chest to push himself up. Kariden swung the rod in a low arc, connecting with downward side of Dessero’s face, the force of the blow spun the man around on his back with a spray of hot blood. At the end of the arc, Kariden twirled the rod around and thrust the blunt paraboloid finial into the hollow of the man’s throat.

The gurgles bubbling out of Dessero’s mouth were sickening sounds that complimented the boiling hatred Kariden felt. It wasn’t a man whose good hand gripped and slipped along the shaft pinching his throat. A man’s legs didn’t kick. Here was a monster. Kariden saw nothing but red, like the warning of his weave, heard nothing but the whitewater rush of blood against his eardrum, muting the sounds of crying from the corner. Felt nothing but his ragged breath scratching his throat. He thirsted as rain puddled beneath the shattered window. He hungered for cruel justice. To enact the only law the people of Cratertown acknowledged, the law of dominance—to execute those that preyed upon the weak. Dessero gurgled, trying to say something perhaps, maybe a plea for his life. But the rotten bastard would say nothing again, hurt no one again.

Kariden risked a glance at Alys. He heard the distance choking sobs of the little girl from the hall of the floor above. He bore his weight down the shaft of the iron curtain rod, the finial crushing Dessero’s windpipe with a spurt of blood. He pressed down until he felt the cold hard shaft slip off a knot of bone. And he held it there until Dessero’s body quit thrashing.

In that moment, the day had grown dark. The actinic flash of lightning played across the floor. The thunder heralded the awakening of Kariden’s weave. It came alive like a thing stretching after a good hard nap. A shadow stained it, as if there was a furtive personality lurking in the depths of his weave’s cognizance, tempted by the feel of cold iron in his hand.

Kariden opened his fingers with a shudder. The rod rang against the hardwood floor, splashing in the growing puddle of cool rain. Alys stared up at him, hugging herself in the corner, thoughtless of her minor injuries, her hair in disarray and her face drained of blood. A mask of fear.

Here was a killer.

With a wave of fatigue, Kariden crashed to his knees. His weave caught Dessero’s weave’s death transmission, a signal to all Ravens of his demise. The man’s caches were open for capture. Kariden drank them in, hoping to find some reason for this pain and death.

He sank into himself, his head hanging low. Snippets of memory flew past him, he caught them as if snatching them off the wind . . . Ganton angry, asking Dessero if he were crazy, chiding him for being careless and stupid . . . the girl’s father was arriving to find her . . . “Do you have any fucking idea what he will do to you when he finds out!” . . . “Relax, I’ll handle it.” . . . “You think Ulden . . . or that fuck above [Raum] will care if Geselli lands and wipes us out! He can afford a small army . . .” . . . “We’ll pin it on Hasco,” Dessero desperate, nervous . . . Ganton laughs disbelieving, in amazement of the idiocy, “She’s his fucking property!”, a pause, Ganton raking his finger through his hair, rubbing the back of his head as if to coax ideas into the open, “He’s not gonna be exactly thrilled about this either!” . . . Dessero paced, “He’s cutting into your profits with his high-class out-world doxies. He deserves it. Cratertown is ours! Mercator is ours!” . . . “Shut up,” Ganton growls. “Just shut up and let me think.” Pacing . . . a bottle of dascoe . . . a downed glass . . . “If Hasco finds out Ravens are fucking him, Ulden will have our asses. He’ll fucking drown us for screwing things up.” . . . “Then we get rid of Geselli,” Dessero says, “Find someone to take the heat.” . . . Ganton turns to him, “Use Kariden . . .”

Mil groans, lifted his head. Ganton and Dessero laid out an elaborate plan just to incriminate him for Dessero’s deeds. The striker rifle he used . . . Mil had no doubt that if associates of Alys’s father, Geselli, had come looking for his killer, they would have been able to trace the gun back to him.

Anger flashed. And he was a Raven for what! For that piece of shit laying dead before him! Damn-Iman it! Disgust cored his gut. Alys trembled in the corner, muttering incoherent sounds.

“I never wanted this.” He looked at Alys as if she were a stranger, as if all this had not been to save her but to kill Dessero. “I never wanted to be a killer.” He looked down at Dessero’s body, thought of hanging it from a lamp post. “I’ve killed the one that made me a killer.” The body’s throat was a red ruin. “He deserved it. Fucking Raven.” Kariden wondered why he had slipped into Pavic. He didn’t use the language often. If ever.

Kariden went to stand and put his hand down on top of one of the power cartridges for his Mekmore. It was a wonder he hadn’t stepped on one during the fighting. He scooped up three  and made his way down the stairs, the wounds in his legs grew hot and sweaty as the weave pushed the shot out and mended the injuries. He picked up his Mekmore from the floor, popped open the chamber and stuffed the cells into their holes. He pulled two more from his coat’s inner pocket and loaded them. He closed the chamber with his palm, looking down at the innkeeper.

The little man was awake, frozen immobile by fear. The man with a disabled weave killed Dessero with a skumping curtain rod. Who would believe it? Ending him should have been like skewering sea-rag in a basket, but the bastard . . . He was transmitting on open channels like a dog pissing itself.

“Go somewhere,” Kariden ordered.

The innkeeper struggled to his feet with a groan and stumbled toward the door, one hand against the bridge of his nose, the other held out splayed in front of him. Rain flew in the open door as he passed. When Kariden turned around he found Alys jerking her gaze back to him. She had been looking up the stairs, toward the crying little girl.

Kariden bent for the shotgun and broke it open. He spilled the cartridges into his hand and dumped them into a coat pocket. He threw the gun behind the registration counter where it crashed into the inert robot. Alys shuddered at the sound as he returned to the staircase landing.

“The Rector’s men should be here any minute.” He looked up to the second floor. “Go see to her. Come back down and wait for them.”

Alys shook her head. “You.”

“There’s no one else here. Just us. They cleared the place out for this bit of business.” He felt dark.

She stood, nodded, wanting to flee and wanting to stay. Wanting to look into his eyes and wanting to avoid them. “Thanks,” she muttered.

“The Rector will help you.”

She nodded again, then broke for the stairs, one bare foot stepping into Dessero’s dead hand, moving as if Kariden had his own repulsive field.

Maybe I do, he thought. His eyes fell to the body at his feet. He felt odd. As if that stain on his weave wrapped around him like dark brooding wings. “Fuckin’ Raven,” he muttered. “Deserves wings . . .” The Pavic rolled off his tongue in meaty drops. There was a strength in that stain, a command presence that he welcomed. Dessero enjoyed setting macabre messages. Let him be one. One not to be forgotten.

“Wings,” Kariden mumbled, holstering the Mekmore inside his coat. Wings wouldn’t do any good inside the inn where no one could see them. He had to take the body out. He bent and grabbed the corpse by the ankles, thinking the man had great boots and he should keep them.

No! He didn’t have time for this. He needed to wait for the Parish officers to see Alys and Juildi’s daughter taken to safety. He needed to protect them against Ganton, who was sure to come. He needed to find Daphia. He needed to get Dessero’s cached memories to her so that she could deliver them to her father. Ganton threatened the fragile trade agreement between Ulden and Hasco. Chief Ulden had to learn this.

But the idea that stained his weave bludgeoned foremost in his mind, pressing him into action. It was a good idea, this message. Kariden found himself dragging the body through the door, out onto the porch and into the torrential downpour. He was drenched immediately.

In the center of the street, he rolled Dessero’s lifeless form prone, thinking it was a shame the bastard was dead. He found himself merging his dust with Dessero’s, forming axes and knives sheathed around his fist, finding the right implements. He sliced the coat and the shirts underneath, peeled them back. The dead flesh gleamed in a sheen of fresh rain. An axe head formed around Kariden’s fist. He swung down, chopping into the ribs along the spine.

His urge to vomit had been locked shut, as if put on standby, the feeling never abating. Still he worked—disconnected—the weave performing. Knives cut flesh. His own hands removed the greasy, red stained ribs. Gristle tore. Kariden blacked out once he saw the jellied pink-purple mass of exposed lung, his hands reaching into the postmortem wound.

 

 

 

Mil Kariden swayed on his feet, the ghostly stain on his weave dissipated, like the memory of an thing that never was, never happened. Dessero’s lungs had been removed from their cavity, opened like wings across the ruin of his back. Lifeless blood pooled, mixed with rain, became the color of ceremonial wine. Silver strands of thicker weave filaments were visible in the wound and across the lungs like a net of fine thread. Spider’s webs.

Had he really done that? Kariden staggered back, dropped to his knees and spewed the contents of his stomach. Upon looking up, he saw men standing in open loading bays of the warehouse across the way, silent and unmoving, little smears of fear. He heard an approaching vehicle and turned his head.

The men of the Parish came in a rumbling chariot, squeezing by Kariden and the corpse in the roadway. Kariden said nothing as the two of them climbed out; he knew the dark-skinned man and his sandy haired partner. Both looked at Kariden and the horror at his feet with expressions of shock and pity, having chanced upon a man losing his mind and not wanting to have anything to do with him and his desecrating act. There was a moment of hesitation when Neelon, the dark figure, wanted to help Kariden, but the Raven shook his head. “Get Alys.”

They fled into the Sea Breeze. Kariden crossed to his putter.

Daphia.

 

 

 

The sea of revelers were loath to part as Kariden pushed through them under the dim lights and strumming beats of Mauhager’s main floor. They shot irritable looks and groans of alarm and protest. Drinks were shoved, sloshing and splashing, wetting wrists and staining clothes. He moved toward Daphia with the wrath of Ganton urging him along, ignoring a club security officer moving in his wake shouting for him to stop in violation of the “no wet clothes” policy.

An inconsequential misdemeanor. Kariden’s weave was on the Raven channels. Chariots approached on orders for his apprehension. They waited for a lander from the Ara’ Zarak, the Homesteader class orbital station Raum had commanded decades ago. Ravens in the room were alerted. Kariden was aware of them moving through the club, converging on him. Through Daphia, Loddo Ulden was his salvation.

Flaring sweeps of brilliant light and syncopated beats like the patient measured booms of war drums disoriented Mil, adding to his desperation. What music was this that drove them to frenzy? Rough fingers brushed his shoulder and he halted, spun, his fist leaping out before he was aware of the action. The blow felt as if is shattered his arm. The head of the security officer complaining about his wet coat shook twice as the man rocked back into the mob behind them. Kariden resumed at haste, leaving the shouts and cries of alarm behind him, out of his mind. He raced up stairs to the very-important-persons level, cold-cocking a Raven that stepped out at the bottom of the stairs.

The man had accused him of murder.

Kariden chuckled. Bore into the thinner crowd at the top of the flight. He saw Daphia at her usual place. Ravens converged. Mil held a ball of dust growing solid, he loaded it with Dessero’s cache. He shouted her name.

She stood up from her booth, her surprised face behind confused and alert faces of clubbers. He pushed through to her. “Your father—”

Arms wrapped around his thighs and he hit the floor hard. A Raven scrambled to contain him. He kicked absently trying to free his pinned legs. Party goers fled, opening the way to Daphia. “Get this to your father.” Kariden tossed the little ball of hardened dust that liquefied and splashed against Daphia’s blouse, below her left clavicle, transferring its information into the computational matrix of her clothes.

Raven’s flocked around Mil Kariden, punching, kicking. Many were friends of Dessero’s. They pulled him down the staircase without care for his being. He recognized their leader as one of Ganton’s sidemen, the one that tossed him his payment for assassinating Geselli. They hauled him toward the door through a parting of the mob, passing the club officer who snuck in a special kick to his ribs. Kariden felt nothing, numb, as if all his sensation had fled to his brain and closed the door behind it, leaving the pain elsewhere.

Outside, under the overhang, he was dumped unceremoniously to the damp concrete at a pair of dark specialized boots. The murder of Ravens stepped back. Kariden looked at nothing but the toe of one boot but he noticed the palpable awe and fear in the air. No one said a word. Engines ran idle. The boots moved aside and another pair marched toward him. Strong hands grabbed his upper arms. Strong arms pulled him to his feet. Raum’s special guard had Kariden in their clutches, and these men were not Ravens.

Raven’s were children next to these.

 

The guards marched him to a bug-like lander parked beside the club, a lander not like the gleaming ovoid of some distant dream. He saw pilots seating beyond the horizontal bubble viewports going through their checklists. Sensor booms like insect mandibles moved to and fro, tasting the gravity field and atmospheric conditions. Kariden was lead to an open door at the center of the craft, under the edge of the carapace hull plates and between the raised gravity burner booms and splayed landing struts. Internal components ticked and hissed, the power core bled off a disturbing subsonic thrumming Kariden felt in his gut.

Mil went up the steps set inside the lowered door. More of the Honor Guard sat inside, with staff-like weapons held vertical. Men followed him in, he was directed to sit. Places were taken and the door shut. Kariden realized he still had his gun, and all his things, as though such weapons were mere toys he was allowed to keep.

Overhead lights flared on, and Kariden winced under their brilliance, finding them far brighter than what was necessary. The dark men around him were not bothered by this. Shielding his eyes, he discovered the men were oil black, their skin gleamed under the harsh light. Small eyes under jutting brows peered at him with terrifying intelligence. Their noses were flat and broader than any he had ever seen, nearly as wide as their mouths. All were bald, wearing tight skullcap cladding, and strange armor coverings and sheaths on torso and arms. All were silent and forbearing, sitting with an assuredness that they were the absolute masters of their own lives, that death could not touch them. Death was what they issued.

The cabin came alive with loud mechanical and fluid sounds. The booms lowered, the fat disc units on the end trapping and blocking gravity, redirecting it back at its source. The lander lifted as if on a cushion. Jets fired on a hissing rumble of hot gas. They climbed through the sky.

The guard seated across Kariden raised a brown palm. They too must have had augmentative network of machines assisting their bodies for a deep blue glow struggled to escape his hand, coming from a point somewhere below the skin. Kariden felt a wave of dizziness and grasped a pole of the framework of the seat that ran deck to ceiling. Parts of his brain tingled and sparks exploded in his vision. The sensation faded and the guard dropped his hand.

The dark man spoke in a rolling language he had never heard, yet understood clearly, “The White God awaits your audience.”

It was then that Mil Kariden noticed the men also sat with great reverence and respect.

 

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Ganton opened the passenger door of his chariot, hesitated. Inside sat Maonen, Loddo Ulden’s sideman, brooding and perpetually malicious, draped in a black tailored greatcoat with a crisp tricorn in his lap. He cut his thin dark eyes to Ganton, his block of chin pointing ahead.

The Raven Boss climbed in and shut the door. “If Raum doesn’t kill him, I got something special planned for that little bastard.” True angry edged his voice, sharp as a razor. “I’ll cut his lungs out and let him die by it.”

“Raum’s law is his own,” Maonen said in a deep scratchy rasp. “He accords us our own.”

“And I plan to use it,” Ganton snapped. He leaned forward to address the driver in the control well. Let’s get to Skulls.” They were parked outside of Mauhager’s, with traffic slipping around them. He’d rather surround himself in dark coziness, with young hot flesh in his hands.

Maonen held a hand up. “Stay here.” He turned to Ganton. “I won’t take much of your time.”

Ganton found his own tricorn itchy and removed it to a place on the seat at his thigh. He brushed a curtain of lank gray hair from his face. “I know things got out of hand,” he said, “but it’s done now. Ended.” He winced at the noticeable plea in his tone.

“So you do understand Ulden’s displeasure.”

Ganton thought about what to say. “If Kariden hadn’t—”

“Shut up.” Maonen’s words were calm and softly spoken, but held a great weight of command. He refused to look at Ganton until it was time to look the man in the eyes. Instead peering at the optic array on the door, watching the people milling about the old witches in their kiosks drying damp clothes for a scratch of slips and bits.

Maonen continued, “Alliances are fragile things on worlds like this. As fragile as say, a whore’s face. You should have taken care of the issue when you first were informed of it.”

Ganton squirmed. “You know I couldn’t,” he growled with a hint of anguish. His body seem ready to explode into violence.

Maonen nodded, refused to look at the man. “Then the problem lay in your parenting skills.”

“She’s just a fuckin’ whore,” Ganton spat.

“She’s another man’s money,” Maonen corrected. “You never threaten another man’s money. Especially if that man is Delavantae Hasco.”

“That rat is taking money out of our system.”

Maonen sighed. “That rat dangles politicians from his fingertips.”

Ganton said nothing.

“What keeps Hasco at bay is duty free trade,” Maonen said, “Pavona oft times keeps a blind eye to the uncivil worlds—politicians hate paying the taxes too. They rake in their profits. But spur Hasco’s ire, and he’ll sell Mercator as a tax revenue haven. Just like he did Borathane.”

“But Raum—”

“But Raum what?”, Maonen said. “A cruiser would wipe out the Ara’ Zarak.” He imaged the five frigates storming out their wormholes and docking together into a battleship that would lay waste to the Homesteader. “A governorship would end us all. And you’d risk that? You should have ended Dessero when you had the chance. It would have mitigated things.” He finally let his gaze lock onto Ganton.

Nervous anger washed over the Raven Boss’s face in comprehension. “You daren’t,” he growled, reaching into his coat for a weapon as his vision suffered a white-out— weave sensory overload.

Maonen hid in his left hand a pen of dust. As he swept his arm out it formed into a spike. He planted it into Ganton’s forehead with a groan of effort. The spike sucked itself into the wound, nanophages poured forth into the man’s skull, making short work of his brain. Maonen leaned over and unlatched the door, then twisted on the seat and kicked the body out onto the street.

 
 

 

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Originally, the story was to shorter, and I had planned for Mil Kariden to learn that Dessero had hurt the girl and simply went out to find Dessero and ambushed him. They would have a fight in a cyberscape where Kariden would learn why he hurt the girl, the Dessero breaks the weave intrusion and they fight and Kariden ends up strangling him with a wandering vine, then performs the blood raven. I had that scene in my mind, but when I got to the point where Kariden gets the truth from Alys, I had to deal with the innkeeper.

Initially Kariden found a whore and her clients attending to the innkeeper, and he had them leave and took the man hostage as he waited for the Parish officers to arrive. Then he would find the teddy bear in his car, and so on. I didn't like this turn of events. I realized that I wasn't allowing Dessero to think for himself, that I was writing to get to a planned scene and not letting the story tell itself. So I had Dessero come up a back stairway. (Did I add the back stairway? If not I meant to.)

I also had the miner enter the room and try to kill Kariden and Alys, and Kariden kill him, just as a means of tying off a lose end. But I figured the miner had one job to do, and that was load Alys with the weave hacking trap and get the hell out of there. He wouldn't return. Plus I hope his absence heightens the tension, because I want it to be in the back of the reader's mind that this guy can pop out of anywhere at anytime and cause hell. And maybe a little misdirection that he is at the top of the stairs.

The teddy bear initially was set upright as a blatant warning, but on a reading, I felt that Kariden would recognize it as such and would know the greater danger lay where he was expected to run. The situation is more uncertain with it just laying there dropped.

Since Kariden's weave is his major strength, I had to take that away from him. When I put him in that corner of the stairwell, I had to figure out a way to get him out of it. Since he's been pretty good fighting with his hands with speed and agility, I decided that Tullis has a greater gravitational pull (11.2 m/s^2 -- you do the math) to lend to Kariden's stronger musculature, but too much. He looks like anyone who works out regularly to keep muscle tone, and that's been established in "The Rector". So Kariden has a natural quickness.

I didn't want Dessero (or any villain) to be a chatter box and have exposition for the sake of exposition. I prefer a Stephen Segal fight scene that ends as soon as it starts and there is no comic book banter while it happens. This feels more genuine. I want realistic action with realistic consequences. I don't want the girl to hug and kiss him for saving her life, I her to recognize the killer and respond naturally to that fact. This is dark stuff. Don't look for happy endings.

What this story does for me is to highlight the areas in "The Raven" and "The Daughter" that need to be changed to make the threat of Hasco, and of Dessero and Ganton more obvious. This means making more to do with the tank of weaves in Skulls, and probably less of Thessa, and drop hints that Ganton and Dessero are looking for a patsy.

So Kariden is off to see Raum, and oh what plans do I have for that confrontation. There you will learn more about what all this is grand story is all about. But first I have a Daphia tale, "Figurine" in the wings that takes place right after events in "The Rector". She's important, you need to meet her. I want to edit "The Daughter" to bring to light the trade agreement between Ulden and Hasco, a nugget of information that will tell you all you need to know about these men. And I want to rewrite "Falling Star" that will take us hundreds of years after the Exodus, with a scout looking for those responsible for wrecking havoc on the Earth. They will learn something they didn't expect and discover a new horror. (If you've read the old "Falling Star", you'll know what that is.) And I have another short story that first came to me in good ole 1997 called "Counterfeit" that I realized would fit this universe perfectly, and it takes place in good ole Right About Now that concerns a group of discovered missing persons that aren't what they seem.

Three stories and some edits to get us on track, before we find out who Raum is and what he wants.

 

Post Script: Sometimes I have an actor in mind when I create a character. When I was thinking of Maonen, I thought of Michael Wincott. So far the other characters are drawing blanks.

 

 

 

 

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http://youtu.be/kM9WusAG854 : Lullaby, by Warrior Soul